They say its just a crush,
and you're the only one who makes me blush.
Never have I had such an adrenaline rush as I do around you.
And heres your cue,
Come on, its time you knew;
yeah, everything everyones been saying is true.
Everyones been talking to you
and I've been trying to give you clues.
So now lets reveiw our past and you'll see
Our realtionship is well overdue.
Lucas, let make our debut,
because i didn't fall, I flew in love with you.
Author notes
I haven't got him yet . . . but I'm working on it everyday. -wink-
A contest entry
- Teenagers [Kids] In Love by Rilly.
550 points, ended March 9, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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hey
very true gir;s get a weird feeling around a boi they like nice poem love it
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again..repetition of sounds both at the ends of lines and within lines was great.
"They say its just a crush,
and you're the only one who makes me blush.
Never have I had such an adrenaline rush as I do around you."
I love how you brought the 'ush' syllable in to the third line, but did it in the middle. It was done very well...and was rather Poe-esque.
"Everyones been talking to you
and I've been trying to give you clues."
that's the only one that seemed forced...but I have no suggestions on how to change it. You're far better at rhyming than I am. -
aww this is so sweet.
good luck with him and on the contest =]]
Rilly
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