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brush of innocence

 

 

 

there is a  voice

in the air tonight

denser than 

the evening fog

 

 

music lies between

each dark step

in this sad little town

called the world

 

 

i have no solving words

for the open chaos

nor a paint

bright enough

to cover

the wilderness

 

 

i cannot separate

personal fury

with white walls

when

lonely is this town

and

 

virgin is not yet

                                       a colour

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Kalamina
    April 2, 2008

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    Excellent poem, you truly captured so much in such a short poem, i enjoyed every single phrase, every description, such bare honesty and truth in each word. I enjoyed this a lot.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 23, 2008

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    Nicci, has said it all Richard... a poignant piece with some great thought and imagery....

    good luck in this contest
    G.x


  • Nicolette gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    "i have no solving words"

    .... to describe the impact of this poem, Richard. Such a profound, poignant, beautiful, deep piece of writing this is. I loved the shades of grey and white here...all the takes on and nuances of black and the contrast to "virgin", to innocence.

    I also liked the voice here... both personal and socially conscious. Just a great piece of writing that makes itself sit in the eyes.

    Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of poetry, of soul with us in the contest.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Ryno
    March 2, 2008
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    Thats the sound of my jaw dropping to the ground.
    Loved the piece.

  • Rowan gold member
    March 2, 2008
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    wow.


  • Everwind Rising
    March 2, 2008
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    Blilliant use of imagery to create and maintain mood!


  • poet2angels gold member
    March 1, 2008

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    This is brilliant....once again...
    I love every line from beginning to end so I cannot choose favorite lines, but I think you took the theme and ran away with it...
    So perfect

    Lynda


  • Randomly Beautiful
    March 1, 2008
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    This is gold.


  • marc creamore
    March 1, 2008

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    Deep, beautifully so and oh so profound, rich and vast . . . another one to mull over from your talented and socially conscious pen!


  • Celticmoon
    March 1, 2008

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    Alright Richard,
    Why exactly have you not put a book together yet?
    I'm waiting for that, truly I am.
    It would be a grand one to add to my collection

    As for this new piece,
    well yes this is clearly a masterpiece and unmistakable one of yours.
    You spin words in a way I can only dream of doing.
    I admit I have learned much from reading your work
    and yes I admit I am hooked

    I love that last stanza.
    The way it hit me was unbelievable.
    It's still rolling around in my head.

    Love this one hun!

    Blessings
    Bel


  • Night Hope gold member
    March 1, 2008

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    "i have no solving words
    for the open chaos
    nor a paint
    bright enough
    to cover
    the wilderness"

    Ahhh, but I believe you do, Scribe. Beautiful yearning within these lines, my Friend. Hmmm...I always thought "virgin" was white...at least that's what all those brides told me. or perhaps it's only 'cause I must have been blue. Gorgeous & profound, m'Dear. Good luck in Nic's contest, Sweetie. Wanderer

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