I try to close my eyes
Staring at the women you made me
You destroyed me
Slap after slap
Kick after kick
The scars you left
Are there for the entire world to see
Scars of your bitterness line my face
And your bruises of hatred coat my arms
Eternal signs of abusive hatred
In a list
A contest entry
- & that is the powerhouse of poetica [2.5hrs] by Ryno.
300 points, ended March 4, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything that is funny,or dark and visually appealing by Alive Again.
550 points, ended April 11, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
-
great read thanx 4 entering good luck
-
A very strong and dark piece, you really touch the reader with your heartfelt descriptions.
A suggestion I have to this piece is to work on your phrasing. I really liked the first two lines but after that the word could've been voiced differently to make the piece strong throughout the whole thing.
Grim sentiments, grim subject, but nice work
Thanks for the entry. -
brilliant I LUV IT^^
ur a real great writer
Adding your comment:
