I seen alot of stuff in my life.
Things i hate.
Images of past deaths,
Keep me awake.
Thoughts of my dad hanging,
But i won't break.
Keep on the right path,
For heaven sake.
I was always told,
Everybody makes misteaks.
It's usually when your led astray,
By all the snakes.
Noone relises how hard it is,
They say piece of cake.
With the pressure that im under,
I feel like i could break.
I'm trying to get my head straight,
But my head aches,
Still i'm doing pretty good,
For the amount of shit i take.
A contest entry
- Giving up, Finding hope, Give it all! by darkhawk.
450 points, ended March 2, 2008, 13 entries
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u r strong and u always will be dont lose it
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GOOD JOB I LOVE THE WORK YOU DO KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK
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good
Good but the rhyming is a little forced and would sound better if you just let it flow from your head. Great write though keep it up and thanx for entering -
great job on this babe. we all make mistakes and and we all deal with them differently. u've dealt with ur mistakes in a good way and i'm proud that ur mine.
i love you and i'll always be here by ur side no matter what.
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this poem is great great work and keep it up
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Life is hard, of coruse its not gonna be a peice of cake but u have to try anyways. Really great job tho. Good luck in the contest
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interstin
theres one line wit a typo
Noones relises how hard it is, very simple short and to the point the emotion is felt within ur poem the words and flow are good good luck
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