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Waiting for You

after a year of waiting
it’s finally here
time for you to come home
it has been a long year
loosing teeth
second grade
school time
mommy first aid
field trips too
I can’t wait
to share these with you
everyone is growing up
some  moving away
we think of you everyday
we want you to be here with fun times to share
hold you tight, show you we care
its coming soon
enjoy the time we spend together
before we know it
you'll be gone again
fighting for our country
will we ever win?
deployments are hard on families, they say
with your home-coming soon
getting easier everyday
anticipation is a word I know too well
been waiting for this day a long while
when you come home, we see that smile
we can't wait to see you again
finally this waiting will end

Author notes

Wait(ing) for you
Written by me from my son's point of view while his father is in Iraq
option 3 deployments

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  • ur-ma-warnd-bout-me
    July 5, 2008

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    it is hard on the kids, i have friends that are parents with their kids still here, and they arent even deployed yet. good job, and good luck in the contest


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    June 25, 2008

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    Still cried

    Wow i like this alot its very well written and worded great. Thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck!
    ..

  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    June 18, 2008
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    God.. i cried..
    Wow this is great
    very well written
    thanks for entering my contest
    i wish you the best of luck
    for you

    xxx--<3--
    Shelly


  • camo.egg.army.gurl
    June 15, 2008

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    omg...i cried...

    good luck in my contest...
    i know what its like to be a kid whose daddy is never around..my dad served in the navy for 18 yrs


  • Rianna Bear
    May 20, 2008

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    i love the viewpoint from your son! that was so sweet!!! made me feel happy and sad at the same time! it's all about that first moment back in their arms, right? that first smile...and the past months just melt away! i remember that feeling. it's so overwhelming and you captured it well.

    *rianna


  • Elizabeth883
    May 16, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my contest. I really like how you took it with what your son would say, very original, and that- is a rarity these days.


  • JustxThexBeginning
    April 18, 2008

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    i like the take on the situation... first of all i have to say thank you to your husband... what he does what he does, our country can sleep in piece another day... that is totally admirable... i like that this poem was written from your son's point of view... good luck to you and your son and good luck to you in this contest...


  • Blooming Poet
    April 12, 2008
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    Beautiful poem, so well penned. i still love it. Good luck in my contest


  • luna-midnight gold member
    April 12, 2008

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    awww what a great write kinda sad and all too...but lovely done
    and good luck
    take care
    stephaie


  • Pollycheck
    April 7, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my military contest. I have noticed a couple of typos in your otherwise well written poem.

    anticipation is a word I know to well - anticipation is a word I know too well

    we can't wait too see you again - we can't wait to see you again


  • larkbird
    April 7, 2008

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    Beautiful

    This is a really well written poem, and reads well from the veiw point of a boy missing his dad. I really loved it, and the flow was very nice as well. You are missing an 'o' on like, line twenty six I think (you have 'to' instead of 'too') but other then that, it is really well written.
    Good luck and God Bless your family


  • Blooming Poet
    March 9, 2008
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    SO SAD.


  • creationsfromheart
    March 5, 2008

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    I love this message and it speaks so much, this is a write that I could careless if there was a punctuation mark in it or not, it is heart felt shows love and tenderness and tells so much of what is missed through this time of war, I think it is a beautiful write, no trophy needs to be on this one to show it is truly a perfect write that will touch many hearts!


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    March 4, 2008

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    Its really a good poem although punctuation would help this one alot. Its really heartfelt though. I was deployed in Iraq in 2003 and I know how hard it is being deployed as well as being in the family of someone who is deployed. Thank you for your entry.

  • The Inc
    March 2, 2008
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    I liked the message here, but to be honest the overuse of the comma really became irritating after about the fourth line. Also, the rhyme started out well, but then became erratic further down.

    Thank you for your entry. Good luck.


  • Whispered Secrets
    March 1, 2008

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    Another beautiful write. This is going to be a hard contest I judge and there have only been three entries. It's an emotional write and I've never really read a poem like it. I've never read a poem about a husband in Iraq to be honest and I've help contests where I asked people to write about the war.

    Not once did I receive an entry where someone said they had a lover IN iraq.

    People just say things about it but they never think about how the families feel until they turn on the news and see families running up to soldiers who have just come home.

    I like this write, a very beautiful piece in its own way.

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