I took you to be
my air,
my sun,
my water
Part of my life
A part I needed to keep going
But he's right
You're just my drug
I can't survive without you
Without this constant high...
I can't stop myself.
I can't stop hurting these people
Who want to know what's wrong
Who just want to know
Why I seem so...dead
So hollow
The only thing worse
Is that I'm not so sure I want to stop...
Author notes
Based on the Bella Edward/Jacob thing in Eclipse. You know, where Jacob's like... I could be your air, your sun, but he's just your drug. You need him to survive.
I really liked that part ^-^
A contest entry
- Giving up, Finding hope, Give it all! by darkhawk.
450 points, ended March 2, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Twilight [the novel] by Stephanie Meyer by ConvenientExcuses.
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What do you think?
Comments
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This excellent! Brilliant job with Bella's emotions. The last line really hit home!
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I really love this piece. You've definitely captured the struggle the main characters are feeling. Twilight is such a great book...haha. =]
Thanks for entering and good luck!
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I liked this, it expresses how confused you are about love, how addicted you are to it, and the sort of regret you have for not being able to stop, or not even wanting to. I especially like the second stanza,
But he's right
You're just my drug
I can't survive without you
Without this constant high...
it really tied this poem together. anyway, this was a very good write and thanx for entering!
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I don't know how fictional or nonfictional this is, but I could really relate to it. I like the "you're just my drug" part too ^.^ Can I call you sometime?
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You have some really awesome one line endings lately. This can be soo true in some unhealthy realationships. This flows really well and is an awesome write!
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MY GOSH, when did Twilight get so popular????????? okay sorry, I'm just getting kind of annoyed by it. But otherwise, tis a great poem.
*KT*
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perfect
great poem! i loved the emotion in it! you should really look into joining my contest! you have exactly what im looking for in a poem!
allpoetry.com/contest/2393713
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