As I bow my head
Deep into my lap
I start to reminiscence
On all the things I never said
The tears of hope
Stream down my salted cheeks
Each droplet rubs my skin raw
I know it hurts but I will learn to cope
Though you are miles away tonight
I pray I fill your thoughts
As the one women to always
Hush your doubts with the vows I recite
Author notes
1. A poem saying you are for pro long distance relationships;
c. you ARE in one and refuse to let go.
Love knows no distance
"I whisper secrets just for you to hear"
In a list
A contest entry
- Options, Options, Options; by Whispered Secrets.
375 points, ended May 5, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Whatever by crazymomma.
450 points, ended June 9, 2008, 76 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is so sweet. I had a long distance relationship for about a month and it got to be too hard. I like the way hope shines through in this piece.
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so tenderly cute... sometimes I feel liek that even though I have no relationship
great write1
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it was worderous
you sounded like you knew how hard it was but were confident things would be okay. I hope you and the person you love last forever. Lovely poem!
Best wishes,
shina
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I can relate to this so much. It's a beautiful piece of writing. Well done and good luck in the contest x
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good luck with the contest this was quite lovely vg follow of the prompt thank you shaing this truly lobely work regards zaj
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As I read this, I wasn't so sure how much I liked it. I thought there was nothing wrong with it, per se, but it didn't seem to be anything new or interesting.
However, the last stanza really made it meaningful for me. Well done for pulling it all together with that.
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I was actually on the phone as I read this and I actually called out "It's BEAUTIFUL"
I can relate to this. When you're in a long distance relationship you have to have a lot of trust and when you don't get to see that person or hear from them everyday, the old things said are the things that keep you breathing.
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