Sun shining brightly
catches my soul
wonder if heaven's up there;
rays of warmth reach
to earth and our lives
with us these light beams do share.
Glorious gold globe
enlightens our days
shows constant compassion for all;
some sense it's brightness
to boost their morale
while others still missing the call.
My skin is atingle
my mind it does run
with fire and future ahead;
radiant lantern rises each morn
we bask in it's flame
then it sinks as we go to bed.
Author notes
and I meditated
A contest entry
- Golden- 15 poets or less/30 lines or less by HeavenonEarth.
950 points, ended March 4, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Bandits United!
Like a breath of fresh air you bring sunbeams into my day, as I read your words, they are so uplifting and calming...the sun definitely puts energy into our thoughts and being, and of course poetry
Congrats on the bronze trophy granny
Love ~Lilac
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Bandits United!!
Wonderful weaving of words and message also images woven within
Love the feel of Your verse~
Magnificent!!
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Bandits United !!
What a gorgeous poem, such a joy and blessing to read it.
You have excellent imagery in this poem and some really great alliterations. I like the rhyming and the title...
Oh well, I love just everything about this poem!
Congrats on the bronze trophy, this poem truly deserves it!
Keep on writing!
Annie
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BANDITS UNITED!!!
Enjoyed the read. I love the sun only when it's rising or setting, otherwise it's too hot for me LOL.
Congrats on the Bronze.
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BANDITS UNITED!!!!
what a very enjoyable read filled with vivid imagery.. the constant rising and setting of the sun each day gives us hope for another tomorrow. thank you for sharing this with us. you are very talented. keep writing! God bless you always
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bandits united!
this is an excellent poem that deserved the bronze! i like the rhyme scheme as well. great write!
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Bandits United!
I really enjoyed this poem it was gentle and very beautiful... there were a few places where the lines could have been constructed differently (example: 'my mind it does run') but that is just my opinion no offense meant... lovely words and a well deserved bronze to go with them - congratulations!
Keep writing
Polly
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Bandits United!
A delightful poem, filled with wonderful imagery. That is one thing we can always count on, that the sun will rise each morning and set again each night right on schedule. The challenge for us humans each day is to let it's light shine through to our hearts. Very enjoyable piece!.
Love & Light
Debbera
Enjoy your day in the spotlight!
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bandits united!!
simply lovely, I always loved both sunrises and sunsets. a true pleasure to witness in life. well deserving of gold I must say, perhaps even a 'rainbow' trophy?
Len
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Bandits United!!!!!!!!!
nice poem soft and flowing that describes the subject very well.
May the stars light your path.
DarkWind -
Bandits United
This is an interesting rhyme scheme - very soft! The author's notes could almost be part of the poem!
Happy bandit day!
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Bandits United!
Such warmth in your amazing write. I could feel the sun beaming on my face as I was reading. Without the sun the world would be a pretty bland and dark place, it rising each new day gives me a new sense of hope. Excellent imagery I so enjoyed reading. I hope you enjoy your day in the spotlight you so deserve it Theresa
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Bandits United
Glorious gold globe
enlightens our days
shows constant compassion for all;
some sense it's brightness
to boost their morale
while others still missing the call.
Nice Verse
A well deserved Bronz
Rick
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BANDITS UNITED !
Erika,
Powerful thoughts on the Sun and our interaction with this glorious globe. I come away with a new perspective and appreciation. Good solid writing my Bandit Sister. Congrats on the trophy.
You have been placed in the Spotlight today by your Bandit Brothers and Sisters because WE CARE!
Bandits Rock!
Brother Dennis
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bandits united
It gave me a smile. It such a lovely thought. I love the sun it was such a great write about it.It gave me such happy thoughts for the day. It great job.
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BANDITS UNITED!
Wonderful Gran,
I am sitting here with a huge grin on my face...You are a great poet and I will make my way through today and every now and then take a peek at the Sun just to make sure...
Thanks for the share *smiles*
Simon
P.S deserved better than bronze...would have been my winner.
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Bandits United
Hey there... Its ur day!!! N what a lovely poem! Its bright, lovely and happy. Kudos to u on the bronze u got there...
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Bandits United!
Nicely done to win the Bronze trophy.
I love the background colour you chose to set this poem off, as well as the font colour.
You've brought out the radiant warmth of this picture in your words as well as the use of colour scheme, and I like the way you've set it out, too.
The only little thing I feel I must bring to your attention is the use of 'do' in 'with us these light beams do share' and 'does' in 'my mind it does run'. It jumps out as being rather archaic language compared to the rest of this piece ~ but who knows...maybe in your neck of the woods, that's how the folks do speak!
We foreigners have to realise that the US has its dialects just like the next country ~ so if that's the case, dear Poet, please forgive me!
Loved it anyhow
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Bandits United
Wow!That was a brilliant poem, as bright as the sun you so powerfully described Great Write Mom! Congratulations on your Bronze Win!
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Congratulations on the bronze trophy. Thank you for sharing this with the group.
animated
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this is beautiful sun shining brightly catches my soul glorious golden globe enlightens our days radiant lantern rises each morn a beautiful poem well done on the gold thankyou for sharing this with the group
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Nicely done, and congrats on the bronze. A very good meditative piece and the theme suits this quite well. I'd like to see some sunshine soon where I live. Sure miss it, while it's dreary and cold outside.
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Congrats on the bronze. The pic reminds me of how much power our creator must have in order to have created the sun ... if one really ponders the glory and magnitude of the universe it should let us know why we cannot look upon His face ... we would probably shrivel up and die.
Your poet was very fitting of the prompt
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congrats on your award is there sun in BANFF-FF-FF GOOD ENDING title tres ordinaire but it works 1st lines=vg thanks for sharing regards zaj
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Love To See Sunshine...........
especially on the col dark and dreary days of Winter. Like today we have had a full scale blizzard here in Ohio dumping over a foot and a half of snow. It is beautiful...but I wish we would have gotten this snow a month ago.Now I am ready for some of that beautiful sunshine and mediation you so eloquently wrote of here!!! Very nice job!!! Thanks for sharing!!!~~Toni~~
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What a creative piece of poetry here. Isn't it true how that even the sun can effect our mood if it isn't out or during the winter months if we are not able to feel it's vibrancy and warmth. Thank you so much for entering my contest and all the best to you
Love & Respect,
~Joy
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