Again,
If it were yesterday
all over -
again
when sunlight spun that ring around your head
a neon destiny
selecting us in new
and zagged nonsense-
the summer blush on youth’s skin,
eyes crashing silent thunder
that time when senses spilled-
mixed together,
watched the ringing phone,
music smells of coming vows
in that crane- necked voice
with a secret between lines,
perpetuals in speechless motion
could promise still bequeath us?
During a lifetime , so full-
would it mock further seasons?
Children,
you .. me
prayer and breath encircled,
the sequenced till
tomorrow-
If it all meant anything forever
why this paradox,
this senseless
exit--- if it already happened
the first to the last time,
would you have done it
all
Again?
”So they are no longer two, but one.Therefore what God has joined together, let man not
separate.” Matthew 19:6
Author notes
A plea to one who is divorcing the other.
Written November 28th, 2003
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Thank you so. Yes. I love the adverbs. I'm an adverbial junkie. They make sense when concrete words do not
I thought you would like this. Somehow. I knoweth by your style that you mighteth..lol
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"when sunlight spun that ring around your head
a neon destiny
selecting us in new
and zagged nonsense"
i love the way you put this-- the adjectives you use make me see "destiny" & "nonsense" in a different way.
i also like how the last line leaves the reader to contemplate the past & also goes with the first few lines--
"Again,
If it were yesterday
all over -
again" ... "would you have done it
all
Again?"
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WOW...outstanding piece. Your imagery is wonderful. I am not good with it at all. You handle it with ease I see.
Such a graceful write.
Sam
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great use of imagery, thoutful, and intense...great work..
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The perfect season full of hope and faith and deep breath from a race well run, and a poem from it well spun. I enjoy the colors you weave into so many of your writes. I dream in vibrant color but sometimes think in black and white. This brings me back into gentle focus. Peace & Love. Timothy
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Oh... forgot... this was my favorite part;
"when sunlight spun that ring around your head
a neon destiny
selecting us in new
and zagged nonsense- " yea... oh yea
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Oh wow... these are powerful statements, very intense. So sad and painful, divorce affects so many people other than the two married. You've written a beauty here...
Touching work,
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This was marvelous. I just can't imagine logging in to AP and not reading such wonderful work from you. I enjoy your style and use of words immensely!
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Good piece Cookie, pray between things with my mom and husband k.....Things not good sadly love does some really sometimes crazy things and doesnt always end up in unity.....But divorces or separations and broken hearts.....I guess this reflects the good between couples when things seem at loss.....Love,Sherry
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I think I'll bookmark this one.
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A really great piece here. Thoughtful. Imagery is special. Nice to see cruise down a tributary of uncharted poetry.
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no going back, but forth, but Forth
within Him one finds Life's worth
within sorrow His glory will shine
within sadness New Songs will chime
Thank you, dearest Dianne, for a wonderful write. God allows man to work out a route in this jungle ... He also forgives imperfections ... Now we must do the same.
Love.
Myra
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