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When Rose Petals Fall

Hushed beauty is captured

for a moment,

 

drifting in soft, ruby flutter

 

and a sigh of woe is heard

from a maternal host,

 

“oh, flesh of my flesh,” 

 

until somber tears rest

but for an instant like

 

languid, slipping dew

 

over moistened, translucent  

constructs of delicate shades,

 

vibrant and rich

  

like the apt and ample palette

of God Himself.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Nicolette gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    "like the apt and ample palette
    of God Himself."

    Indeed.... such a gentle voice here that falls as softly as the rose petals you write about, Michael. The italics works very well to enhance the mood and add pauses and breathes to this poem.... I've found in it a melancholy but then also the rosy light of hope and beauty.

    Thank you for sharing your colours with us in this contest.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Blue Rew silver member
    March 7, 2008

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    A composition of thought and feeling expressed
    in softer sigh of colour...perfect to theme.
    Captivating use of italicized lines to enhance
    the gentle undertone. Blue


  • Night Hope gold member
    March 6, 2008

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    "Hushed beauty is captured

    for a moment,

    drifting in soft, ruby flutter"

     

    This is a lovely, serene penning, Michael. I have only one suggestion; I would hit "enter" a few times at the end of your poem, to set it off more from the bottom border line...to give your readers a moment to inhale, then digest, the beauty of your words. Good luck in Nic & Namita's contest, my Friend.  ~ Wanda

     

     


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 1, 2008

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    Lost for words other than to say how absolutely beautiful this is... your talent shines off the page and touches the heart of the reader!

  • tara wilson gold member
    March 1, 2008

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    beautiful...the italics are very effective in this poem.....

    mj..this is lovely...


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    March 1, 2008

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    Beautiful words which not only highlight your poetic ability but also the spirituality that dwells within you.




  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 1, 2008

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    oh this is beautiful and perfet.your words are truly divine and flow so beautiful across the page.just amazing well done


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 1, 2008
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    perfecto! This is divine, Michael. No other words. Love, Lane


  • luna-midnight gold member
    March 1, 2008

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    awwww wow!!! lovely write, this was really amazing, great job and good luck in the contest !
    stephanie =)

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