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The War

everyday I count the time you've been away
everyday I listen to what you say
everyday my heart wants to play
everyday my hand need a gentle touch
everyday what i ask for, its not much
everyday I count the time
everyday I find words that rhyme

everyday my seconds move so slow
everyday you are safe, this i know
everyday together we grow
everyday I am in love
everyday, peaceful like a dove

everyday I look into your eyes
everyday I wonder when
everyday I pray
everyday its not you
everyday a phone call
everyday our love is true

everyday my heart is at peace
everyday my life is at ease
everyday I want you home
everyday I add to this poem
someday you will be
someday, home safe with me

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military- option 3 deployments
I wrote this poem when my husband was in Iraq

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  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    October 29

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    Nice job on this one. I can see how much you miss him and love him. And, i can see that you think about him all the time. This is a very touching poem.

    Mike


  • condor gold member
    October 20

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    This write is very touching and so sincere and I love how you said you added to this piece every day while he was away.It is really sad that so many loved ones are apart and so much time is lost between them due to wars and actions which they proudly go to to protect their country. I really really truly hope that you are both together now and enjoying life to the full, you don't say. Thank you so much for entering and I wish you the very very best in the contest.


    • peridotPixi
      October 20
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      i really dont add to the poem much anymore-he's in afgahnistan this deployment


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    June 27, 2008

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    This is very beautifully written. I am sure you worry about your husband everytime he is sent away. I enjoyed this heartfelt read! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • camo.egg.army.gurl
    June 15, 2008
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    omg...i cried...

    very heartfelt...definately understand your feelings...
    good luck in my contest


  • Elizabeth883
    May 16, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry, It definatly brought home the point. Good luck in the contest


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    May 15, 2008

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    Thank you for your beautifully heartfelt entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • MalevolentDesire
    April 29, 2008

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    This is a moving piece, and I can feel your emotion behind it.

    You have captured the feeling of loss people feel when their loved ones go away to war, and I'm sure a lot of people would be touched by this.

    I thank you for your entry, and wish you luck.


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    April 29, 2008

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    Good Poem. I was engaged myself when I left for Iraq and unfortunatly I cane back single. The poem is heartfelt although the repeativeness is slightly distracting. You did good with it though. Good luck in the contest.


  • Pollycheck
    April 7, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my military contest. I relly like the sentimental value that is behind this poem, but I did find some minor errors in it.

    everyday I count the time youv'e been away - everyday I count the time you've been away

    everyday my hand need a gental touch - everyday my hand needs a gentle touch

    I did notice that the last two lines just do not seem to flow with the rest of the poem:

    someday you will be
    someday, home safe with me


  • larkbird
    April 7, 2008

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    This is such a hopeful and trusting poem, and so sweet. The message of it is really beautiful, as is the flow and rhyme. I especially loved the last two lines, but the whole thing was wonderfully well done.
    Good luck, and God Bless your family


  • Manoj Sanyal
    March 15, 2008
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    nice poem.
    Best wishes and good luck.


  • Accidentally Poetic
    March 12, 2008

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    WOW! I could just feel the love pour from this piece. Beautifully written! Tell your husband Thank You!

    Bless you both,
    Crystal

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