When we share laughter, There's twice the fun;
When we share success,We surpass what we've done.
When we share problems,There's half the pain;
When we share tears,A rainbow follows rain.
When we share dreams,They become more real;
When we share secrets,It's our hearts we reveal.
If we share a smile,Then our love shows;
If we share a hug,Then our love grows.
If we share with someone On whom we depend,
That person becomes Family or friend.
And what draws us closer And makes us all care,
Is not what we have,But the things that we share.
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Lovely
What a delightful poem. Call me old fashioned (You would not be the first) But I like a good ryming poem, and that is not all that common now days. So in that this was a very refreashing poem.
I am not entirly sure how, but I think that you could try to improve the flow of the second part of line four. It seems a little choppy, and seeing as the rest of the poem flows so well, that distracted me a little bit. But it is not a bad line just the way it is, so either way.
Well done, and God Bless
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