As winter draws its breath
And spring winks its eye
Kiss me, dearest Vickie
And hear my heart sigh
Let your lips greet me
With your loving glance
Feel my pulse quicken
Our tongues begin to dance
Let our bodies merge
Your heat becomes mine
Soon our fingers roam
When our souls align
Passions rise to fore
Sweat glistens brow
To ride upon emotions
As only love allows
Ecstasy keeps building
The dam cannot hold
A tidal wave of feelings
Flowing uncontrolled
And with a cry of freedom
We chorus our loves pact
As holy fire consumes us
To purge loves sweet act
With embers gently dying
We lie upon our bliss
Begun by your own touch
And a single kiss
Author notes
For you, dearest Vickie
Just me hoping to live this poem with my beloved Vickie.
Deadofknight
Please tell me what you think
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Aw I really love your poem...so sweet, sensual, romantic. What one single touch can lead to...
*Sigh*
Beautiful write, good luck in the contest!
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This was a very great write. It has a very distinct flow to it, and it was so passionate. The rhyme scheme was great, as was the form. I could just picture this, such a romantic moment between to lovers. Very sensual, very romantic. Thanks for sharing. I really enjoyed reading. Keep up the good work.
Love,
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I absolutely loved every second of this poem it was wonderfully written. Very cleaver use of words and I definetly found myself wanting to keep reading. i loved the flow it definetly went along nicely. Wonderful write. Very refreshing and unique. I definetly enjoyed reading so I will be reading more if I have not read more of your poems to begin with. Keep writing you are a true poet. Maybe you can check out some of my poetry i would really love to hear your opinion.
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how very sweet of you to write something this beautiful for the one you love. Nice write and i hope very much that she has read it, nice write
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Excellent
Ah, 'tis a fine romantic write, indeed, with just the right touch of sensuality. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. -
Wow!
This is very very beautiful!
You have such an amazing way of arranging your words.
I love this poem from beginning to end!
"Let our bodies merge
Your heat becomes mine
Soon our fingers roam
When our souls align"
^^^That is absolutely beautiful!
Makes me smile
Keep up the good writing!
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aww, this is beautiful...my favorite lines are the third stanza and the last. "ecstasy keeps building; the dam cannot hold; a tidal wave of feelings; flowing uncontrolled" - *sighs* that is so beautiful. great write...and best wishes to you and vicki
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wow.
this was an awesome poem. keep writing! -
i really liked this poem
a kiss for you
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Let our bodies merge
Your heat becomes mine
Soon our fingers roam
When our souls align
Passions rise to fore
Sweat glistens brow
To ride upon emotions
As only love allows
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Wow. It is very clear what it is you want, and I love how you don't shy away from your desires. Your use of adjectives makes the poem cum to life.
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a good smiling piece of poetry - full of soft and gentle words that fire the spirit towards another in the passion of love.
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Great flow, great subject. Very much truth in this, a kiss can often be the spark that lights the fire. good choice of words... etc... etc =)
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Ecstasy keeps building
The dam cannot hold
A tidal wave of feelings
Flowing uncontrolled
And with a cry of freedom
We chorus our loves pact
As holy fire consumes us
To purge loves sweet act
With embers gently dying
We lie upon our bliss
Begun by your own touch
And a single kiss
yeah a single kiss makes a lot of differences
and your single poem has reminded me lots of single kisses
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that was good it caught my eye!!
keep writing.
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Now this is what a kiss should be like. I enjoyed reading this poem and the words you used. Great job. I also liked the line "Our tongues begin to dance"
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Great poem. Simple But Deep. Love IT
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beautiful!
beautiful flow, amazing use of words and metaphores. I love the line "With embers gently dying, we lie upon our bliss" a very creative way to put it! Thanks for sharing this!
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As winter draws its breath
And spring winks its eye
This is my favorite part of the entire poem. I also like how you put her name in it as you are writing. It makes it to where it is original and no one can steal this from you, your feelings. It is a lovely contribution to AP.
You have a great day.
Thank you for sharing this with me.
It was lovely.
God Bless.
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awesome
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Well done my fellow poet. You did a great job with this piece. Very descriptive and full of emotions. Thank you for sharing this with me and best wishes in all of your endeavors. Keep that pen handy and ever ready for use dear poet.
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its okay. not amazing, i must admit.. i find it a bit clique. i think a few words here and there suggest some of those clique things about love and stuff. hmm..
it was an enjoyable read i must admit. and it flows really well... i give it a 3/5
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Beautifully written.
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my dear bro the love and passion that exudes from your heart and soul shines in ethereal beauty. Vickie is a very lucky lady to be loved so intently ans wondrously by you, my dear one. love you both many blessings always love your friend and AP sis xoxoxoxo
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Cris, it is you who keeps me together. The notion of being loved by you, it keeps me whole and sane.
This is beautiful and something I really needed to read right now. Thank you my love.
Vickie
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Awwwwww
This is sooo cute =)
Amazin job bro I love it sooo much
I miss you btw... and I love you =)
<3 your lil sis
...I havent talked to you in awhile....
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