Does she carry it proud
or with reluctance?
Are her hips thrust forward
with a glint?
Are her breasts high and proud
chin up; aglow?
Or is she coy and shy
and innocent, or pretending?
One never knows...
when the challenge is taken.
But when she is naked and alone
beneath me and her legs apart,
knees up...
Are her eyes open
or closed?
Is her chin up and forward
or is her face aside, closed?
When I suckle her
does she...?
When I push into her
invade her...?
Does she take me
because she should?
Does she lift and join
in the motion of life?
Does one ever know
if it is truth...?
Ami...
Please tell me what you think
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Sexy & Unique Erotica
What an excellent classy write, you were very erotic leaving the imagery to paint the true vision...
novy
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A mystery...I suppose to which only you and she know the true answer.
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"Does she take me because she should?" Very nice....that was my favorite line. Often we feel obligated to sex, I like that you are expressing that with this poem. It's unfortunate that sometimes love isn't enough to stir mutual sexual desire and willingness. I also like that you talk about the fact that even if we can characterize a partner's reactions as passive or whatever else, do we ever really know what it means? Agressiveness could be feigned, and passiveness could be because of bashfulness or no intrest. I don't think we can ever be too sure.
Beautiful poem.
Epiphany.
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Excellent!
Your poem very much reminded me of the song "base level erotica" by My Dying Bride, especially the *Are her eyes open/ or closed?* part. Your flow of language is astounding here, as well as is your ability to put the big questions and themes in life into simple words and melodies.
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A very well written poem. Sex like life is so much a matter of masks.
A wonderful read.
John
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I really liked this my friend. A fantastic piece of writing. Excellent. Kenny
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well done! well thanks for sharing express with great imagery..
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went to your page...
...to read and found nary a thing...879 comments but not a whisper of poetry or prose?
Thank you...
amicus...
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