she is caramel coated
and shines
through verses
whispers of youth
spread beauty
upon white virginal pages
like a lullaby
still echoing
in her mind
she sings poetry
of soft tones
Author notes
To Karamel Kandy, an amazing talented young girl
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Wonderful tribute to an amazing girl! I love the way you used the caramel at the beginning up against the echo later. Somehow it made me think about the process of making caramel. How you start with something wonderful (milk and sugar--white/virginal) and heat it until it becomes richer and more delicious. Her poetry is just like that--pure and unaffected, and yet has the depth of texture and richness that the heating of maturity and life experience brings, despite her young age. It echos like the flavor of chewy caramel in your mouth that you don't just swallow all at once. You have to chew on it, savor it. Wouldn't be the same as just swallowing the milk and sugar.
Anyway, i thought your words perfectly described her and her writing, and was done in such a lovely, soft manner.
Beautiful.
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very nice
sweet poem
I like the last 5 lines best.
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The background goes perfectly with poem. I don't know the poet to who you refer but she must be impressive to have such sweet words written about her. Excellent presentation Mari.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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this is beautiful and so true of this amazingly talented poetess...
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This is lovely and a wonderful dedication to a very beautiful and talented young poetess. I'm so proud of her I've adopted her, lolol.
Seriously...this one sings - just like Namita's poetry!!
~ Nicolette
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Ah you!
I guess some people have auras...some people have things associated with them...maybe she understands herself and has named herself accurately...it seems you think so. I will go read a couple and see, I bet I think she's more like pork or beef...
Wonderful tribute madam, folk are lucky to have you as a friend.
She has white pages? Smart lady.
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DEdication in the fullness of caramel creme de la caramel, lovely!
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WOW, Mari!! You're so very kind. I love you We haven't even known each other for long! This is so beautiful. If my voice is caramel, your voice is pure chocolate. And I love chocolate. Thank you, thank you, thank you You're the best.
I love you 
- namita
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may I adopt both of you : caramel and chocolate ?
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If you do, may I play with the bird?
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Two others have already considere adopting me. Anyway, having two adopters isn't sinful is it?
Yaaaay. Y'adopt Caramel and Chocolate Soooo, you must be cake.
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I like cakes! Chocolate with caramel sauce, that is going to be sweet! Need to renew my special dental care lol
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lol- i love cakes too... especially the chocolate filled ones. Yummmmm.
*dies*
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my name's actually ice-cream ...
beware of a cake wanting to adopt you, (s)he would only use you as a topping ...
I'm more interested in substance ...
and what would empty ice-cream be ?
flavorless ...
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light ice cream lol
Windy or breezy flavour, with sunshine sauce. Sounds tasty!!! -
Caramel ice cream? Chocolate tastes better...
Wait. Plain icea-cream is the best!!! -
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You say that because you never ate my chocolate, or pineapple or strawberry cakes
The only 3 I know how to bake
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Yesh, anything chocolate bakes will be nice. (ice-cream sucks anyway lol)
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Ok, I get what you want, both!!!
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Y'know me. I'm so wickedly clever.
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Your poems put a smile on my face, so this poem is little tiny thing to say thank you so much
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This poem will keep me smiling for a very very long time.
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This is beautiful...
how's the bearded lady doing? Did you lose your clomps yet
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