Silent tears on my cheeks
My eyes flowing out
Wet… my face, my arms
In the silent pool of tears
Tears, hot against my face
Yet, won’t warm my heart
My poor aching heart
Sole survivor in the misery
To die is easier
Than spend time in regretting this
Suicide, it won’t hurt
Takes a few minutes
A few pains…
Will it give more pain than this?
But
Ending one’s pains to start others?
Is it good?
No
Begin a new life
A better life
Forget the fouls, the miseries
Living is difficult, yet simple
It is true
All you have to do
Is to fumble in the dark
Light a candle
And see where life leads
This is hope in the midst of darkness…
A contest entry
- Giving up, Finding hope, Give it all! by darkhawk.
450 points, ended March 2, 2008, 13 entries
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hmm, this poem is very straight forward, the meaning is constantly clear, and it roles off your tongue easily. The only thing I think it needs is maybe a some secrecy, something that makes the reader read it again, trying to figure out what makes you burn inside. I also think that you concealed your emotions through this poem and didn't let it all out. Its time to break free, Let go!....other than that, great write and good luck in the contest
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wow great poem you express your words very well.i can tell this will be a hard contest 4 me to win
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nice poem it has a meaning the flow starts out well but slips off every now and then ima say just my opinion instead of a comma spilt it up make it a new line
this line is confusin
Than spend time in regretting this
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I love the rational in the end. I think we all think of dieing once in a while but "ending one's pains to start others?" such a great line. I love this write, good job
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Love the first line so strong and powerful great imagery the form used breaks the read up a little but all in all a great write best of luck to you in this contest
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