When I feel like letting go
Of everything that I know
There's one thing I'd never let leave
I want your love always with me
Your the one who makes me beleive
I can be who I want to be
The reason I strive
The one why I'm still alive
It's the way you look at me
That makes everything alright
The look that says I love you
Whenever I get that look
From you
I melt
I will swallow my pride
To keep you by my side
You're the most important person on earth
I'm here because I know you are too
I never want you hurt
I never want to lose you
This is something I never wanna lose
Us is something I never wanna lose
It's the way you look at me
That makes everything alright
The look that says I love you
Whenever I get that look
From you
I melt
A contest entry
- First Love by BandGeek101.
475 points, ended April 4, 2008, 26 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - My love's birthday by Meroza.
425 points, ended March 27, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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great piece
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Congrats first of all on the trophies!! Great job in this, I could feel the love. I can relate to the look of love. This was so full of emotion!! Amazing job!! Best of luck in the contest!
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Judging:
- Title: It fits perfectly.
- Is it what I am looking for: Yes, you hit the nail! Perfect!
- Emotions: Full of raw enless love!
- Wowness: Good
- Final word: Its amazing, the words, they are so perfectly placed. This is an amazing poem. Well done! -
wow this was great I loved it all the rhyming was perfect...great job It really connected with me and I felt just as if it was happening to me as I read line by line
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