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The naked truth

Alone in your smile, it lulls me to sleep

as I breathe you in one small breath at

a time

 

like the rings from a pebble dropped in water,

my thoughts dissipate...

the sway of dreams take over;

windows of my mind open, remembering a forgotten rhythm

 

lashes curl in collected colors

sliding across the sky like poetry in motion

with random words falling into symmetrical syllables

creating a ripple over smooth skin

 

I have continuity

roots running deep between spaces of time

collective memories are lost in a pulse

like the voice of water pouring emotions over a cliff

dispersing echoes into heaven

 

deep inside of you, I disregard voids

catching masculine scents dangling from the

house of the rising sun as I pull wishes into my chest

hoping for last night’s moments to linger

 

the morning has no knowledge;

it rolls in with the tides of another day

sweet whispers linger inside an infinite embrace

wrapped in multi-colored rainbows

sliding closer to me as romance lives in repetition

 

words catch in my throat;

beauty plays for me inside the fullness of time

between the concept of ripples we were seeking

true balance in our unbalance world

 

behind white noises we strip down to bare words

beneath bleached bones of our tattered souls

tranquility is swept away swiftly by the weight of

the naked truth

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Prompt: Still Water
WATER: It is all around

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  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 10, 2008

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    very beautiful... the rich imagery is strong and well thought out.. however I do think you've stepped into some cliched metaphors at times, with the poetry in motion and naked truths.... but you did manage to tie the whole piece together...
    (only my thoughts of course)

    well done and many thanks for entering this contest

    G.x


    • zochit2me gold member
      March 10, 2008
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      And I respect your thoughts so much...
      Really appreciate the comment and yes I do tend to bend cliche' at times...

      Thanks for the honest critique, those are hard to come by some times.



      Becky


  • Randomly Beautiful
    February 29, 2008

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    This is another beautiful write. My only suggestion is here...

    windows of my mind open remembering a forgotten rhythm

    maybe a comma between open and remembering? I really have enjoyed reading you. I went to your page, I believe it was last night, and did some reading. Headed to add you before I keep forgetting.