~by Gregg Rowe~
an opaque evening
opens
above rainy clouds
stars
sun eclipses winter
moon
virgin snowflakes flutter
down
A contest entry
- The Red Wheelbarrow by AJ Morelli.
1500 points, ended March 17, 2008, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Loved the imagery, from the night to the stars and moon, to the sun coming up and snowflakes about to come down. I saw your comment for aerospete about caretakers...I am a CNA in a nursing home and unless a resident really says you are appreciated it is not shown enough through our facility like it should...I ask God for a healing for you, but impressed about how strong you are and able to speak about your life...much to be appreciated as well.
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Due to the large number of entries, I won't be commenting on each piece but will certainly be reading and rereading them all. I wanted to thank you for your entry here, I hope to have the contest judged fairly soon...
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i liked the imagery of the poem
However, the images were kind of broken. It wasn't like one scene..perhaps that was the intention.
Ps- the word eclipse has been misspelled in the title and the poem.
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Thsi sounds like it was beautiful to see. I have always loved the way the moon lights up he snow. I love being at my aunts farm in VT, far away from street lights. It really lets nature shine through in all its glory. Great poem
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has potential
I liked the opaque nite.... expected more about the moon and its winter path... but good. -
plainly beautiful
I do like this poem, it's simplicity, its rhythm, its flow. It feels like snow and moonlight. It feels like home. Simply lovely and enjoyable. A different way to see Winter.
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peaceful
short peaceful write for the prompt . . liked "an opaque evening opens" and "virgin snowflkes flutter down" . . good luck in the contest
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nothing but imagery without concepts. A great example of the style.
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Hah! Finally, something inspired by William's "Wheelbarrow" that makes more sense and is more palpable than his poem. You'd give grad students a run for their money, but no doubt they would enjoy the race in this poem. In brevity is wit, but I hunger for more of this sumptuous style. Thanks a lot: you've revived an insatiable desire for more of your work, and from past readings, all it is in this calibre of subtle genius.
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I loved virgin snowflakes flutter down... awesome!
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good luck with the contest good alliteration of the 'O' sounds to begin good title good motion/flow thanks for sharing regards zaj
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NICE
I LIKE IT!!!!!!!! Just the other night, me and my husband watched the eclipse. It was a poetic candlelight dinner for two! What a wonderful image you have penned here, divine!!!!!!!!!!!! AWESOME!
POETDONTKNOWIT
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i klike the way he is able to use natural things to express his feeling
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In the title did you mean solstice? I know the spring and winter solstice each have a beautiful full moon and the two words are similar...
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MMMMMMM!! I felt a tingling sensation within me as I read this! So short and simple. What really did it for me was the opening line--ooh the imagery is astounding!
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...tantalizing.
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Great opening to this short write - like the opening and then the closing at the end. Not sure if you intended to do this , but it worked well here.
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It's deep
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this is a beautiful piece almost has a mystic feeling to it Keep penning and best wishes
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