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phantom fingers trace
the worn letters
of buried names;
calling their bones
to the surface.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Improv Machinery
    March 7, 2008

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    once again i am amazed by the power that you cam put into so few words. how do you do it? the way that your words go with the picture coincides beautifully. i could almost picture that girl performing some sort of resurrection rite to raise a fallen loved one. i have been in a few cemeteries over the past few months and i have had similar thoughts but i never could have put them into words like this. you are a very talented writer, never stop.
    Rob


  • And Hyetal
    March 2, 2008

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    Holy cow wow.

    Mr. Clappy dude here says that this gold was well-earned.

    And I think I'm prepared to marry this one, too.

    ~Cassie


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 1, 2008

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    this is amazing and stunning.it truly reflects the picture wth that deep darkness and sadness in it. truly living to be my inspiration hehe.congrats on the gold


  • Miss Faith
    March 1, 2008

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    How are you so dang amazing?! you definitely deserved the gold my dear!


  • BehindTheShadow
    March 1, 2008

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    This is amazing. So much said, in so little words, and in a very limited time restraint. Beautiful. A well deserved gold. Keep up the great work.


  • N e a r
    March 1, 2008

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    Chilling write here, hun. Love the desciptions... They put me in awe. It just all flows so perfectly, and the picture is just adoring beside this write. Excellent job!


  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    February 29, 2008

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    wow, Excellent work on this poem. Great take on the prompt and best of luck!



    -Steve-


  • Kari gold member
    February 29, 2008

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    I really loved how you started out at the very beginning of this and ended it. Each word is done perfectly.
    Well done


  • Perception
    February 29, 2008

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    I love these words you have penned... they are so perfect... great imagery... amazing descriptions ~ just wonderful


  • luna-midnight gold member
    February 29, 2008

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    awwww great write, so lovely and beautiful, good luck in the contest and great take on the prompt.
    stephanie =)


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    February 29, 2008
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    Beautiful work. Well taken from image.


  • BeautifulFlame
    February 29, 2008
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    Dawn this is wonderful! Loved it!
    Goodluck hun
    Hugs
    ~Lisa~


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    February 29, 2008

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    Damn ~ this is good. I can feel gold coming on. Such descriptive and creative words in so few. Loved every moment it took me through. Well penned fine poet and many blessings, Lavender Butterfly.

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