Here is a little advice for you parent's-to-be.
Keep your babies in their own bed- take it from me.
Because right in the middle of my own tiny home,
My little man has a big boy room all of his own.
It holds a bed and a dresser and things that he needs.
Like video games, a T.V., and comics to read.
Even has a swing hanging from the ceiling above,
Yes, this room is full of things that little boys love.
He has a wooden train table, with trains, cars, and vans.
And a hand painted bed blanketed by Spiderman.
But when night time has fallen and it's time to lay down,
I look into his room, he is nowhere to be found.
He's across the hall sleeping, angelic and serene.
Taking up most of my bed, which happens to be queen.
I look, then crawl on in to my sliver of a space.
To be greeted by a toss, and a hand in my face.
Followed by a little foot grinding right in my side.
He takes up so much room for such a small, tiny guy.
So, I'm lying in bed cramped- I can't take much more.
And then, suddenly, I hear the most hideous snore!
I grab another pillow, throw it over my head.
Go to sleep dreaming of when he is out of my bed.
Moral of this story, if it isn't plain to see
Keep your baby in his own bed, please, take it from me...
Author notes
I have a 10 year old girl, too. One day I will write about our trials and tribulations, lol, after the teenage years, if I make it.
Sadly, this story is 100% true. Room exactly as I described, 5 year old feet right in my ribs every night.....
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A contest entry
- PREWRITES WELCOME! CAN YOU WRITE AND LAUGH AT YOURSELF TOO? This contest is for you!! by ears2hearyou.
900 points, ended March 1, 2008, 26 entries
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I can imagine what that must be like; since *at least for now* my little one is sharing a room with me, this will probably happen to me too. Thanks for the warning, and good luck in the contest!
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the best part of this poem is how clear it is, you wern't wordy, you minded your diction, you made the theme VERY clear, nigh painfully blantent, But it flowed so well. I shall take your advice as me and my girlfriend were talking about the future and how she wanted to have the baby in our room till three and i tried to exclaim how unnessasary 3 years is. And now with your poem saying what I was saying except coming from experiance i can show it to her and maybe shell understand. thanks for the read. I was intrigue
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This is really good. I can't really relate I am not exactly old enough to hav kids and hopefully it will be a LONG time. This is written very well though. great write
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Truth is...funnier than fiction? Time to cut off his side of the bed. You'll get more sleep. Thanks for that.
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Very cute
This is true, if you let them they will take over. It is easier to say no the first time! Great stuff for memories though! Good luck in life and the contest! The Shaker
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wow, I can so relate to this piece. lol. my son does this to me all the time. he doesn't stay still through out the night and snores loudly. lol....so, I know how you feel. this is a good piece cause a lot of mommies can relate to it, I can see why you won gold.
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LOL!
I literally laughed out loud when you mentioned the hand in your face... cuz even though it has nothing to do with my experience... it reminded me of back when my fiance n I FIRST started sleeping in the same bed together when I first moved in with him... he's got a queen size bed, and he manages to take up ALL the bed, and he'd roll over on me, slap me, elbow me, kick me... etc alllll night long in his sleep. LOL
I dunno why but it reminded me and made me laugh.
Over all, this poem was very cute, clevar and quite funny actually.
I know I'll be going through this at some point in my life aswell. lol
This is deffinately one of my faves so far in the contest. So I'll DEFF be keeping your poem in mind when it comes to judgement!
Good luck!
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Wow I love it! Full of meaning, but full of humor as well. Although you make me jealous because I can only wish I had a room as cool as that lol.
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hahaha i love this!!! absolutely awesome!!! i love kids!! hugs to the famous 5 year old
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hmm... This was pretty good, but I don't think it's exactly what I'm looking for... I want a poem for the baby. You did a good jobm though. good luck in the contests... If you like, you can put in another poem for a baby, but this just isn't what I want. Sorry. Keep up your great work, though.
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haahhahhaha. This is my brother in full
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*chuckle*
Another funny but sweet story here. Love the description & rhyme you used here. Bless you & your son, fellow poet. Thanks so much for entering.
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Great poem with good rhyme and flow!
I lived through 3 boys doing the very same thing!
They are grown now and "sometimes" I miss the fling of the arm in my face,the little foot in my back...but I sleep alot better! lol
Great poem
you deserved the Gold!!!
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This is so cute. You know by experience not to do that, they soon control your domain. You wrote a great poem off this, and I hope you reclaim your bed soon! I'm still reading entries, so I can't place it yet, but I'm sure I'll be back.
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whisper
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Cute!
A Ray of sunshine amidst so many heavy pieces. Thanks! I would give you
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Awww cute, i remember my siblings did this to my mom when they were little. He will grow out of it, they did. Is thios true for dogs too?
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Realy good advice I Loved it.
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Good advice you share in these lines. My one granddaughter slept with her mom for years and years, and when she came to spend the night or weekend with us, would wind up sleeping with me, in her bed. Once she fell asleep I would be able to leave, but this went on for many years until she grew out of it. Not a good idea to let them sleep with you when little. A tough habit to break. You made fun it it here, but it can be very serious for all concerned. Easy to read and understand in these lines.
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LMAO!!!!!
I LOVE IT!!!
What a wonderful little story!!!!
I love your descriptive abilities, your rhyming capabilities, and of course - the fact that you have an amazing sense of humor!
You are absolutely being added to my favorites!!!
Any more great tips for Mommies-to-be? Or for women in general?
I'm definitely going to be reading more of your work!!!
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I love this! I don't much like the title because it makes it out to be a really serious poem... But, its really cute, and funny... I really LOVED the descriptions you used! they were just PERFECT...
~wonderfully done here, poet, wonderfully done
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CUTE!
HAHAHA i love this! That is some wonderful advice that i will be sure to remember when the time comes for me to have children. I loved the rhyme and flow... very creative and funny! Hope you finally find some way to get some sleep at last w/o feet in your ribs!!!! -
This is a very amusing write. The kind of laughter you feel inside. Having my brother's sleep with me during thunderstorms only adds to the fact that I know just what you are talking about. It was well written and the simple rhymes were effectively executed.
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this is so funny,such a great topic.you scare me,my baby is six months old and he wont sleep anywhere else but by my side.but anyway,i really like this one its ligt,funny and flows ever so nicely.
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A most beautiful write, I can relate as I have a little girl, well done, Josie
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loved it!
and I hear ya sister, I had a little creepy crawler
sweet girl who would lay across my whole body upside
down. I'd wake up and find toes in my face, and all
the blankets gone!
lol that was wonderfully written to enjoy
I can see now why the co-judge wants to give you the
gold!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )))
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Excellent lesson, shared from experience. Good rhyme and content. I think it would be even stronger with a more consistent meter. Very good advice!
(I dubbed one of my children "rototiller legs"! She could do complete 360's, and somehow the bony little feet most preferred a warm neck or the small of the back!)
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Dude I know the pain - my sis does it to mum all the time, has been for years. Yeah - take it from this lovely, smart, well rhyming poet - make em sleep in their own bed.
Great write, a little funny, but I related too much and liked your wording too much to really laugh out loud, lol... (heh)
Nicely done
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PS shes 6
I think.
or Six this year... yeah, that.
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