the spoon
is silver
tarnished
by the mouth
it was born
to fit
awaits renewal
A contest entry
- The Red Wheelbarrow by AJ Morelli.
1500 points, ended March 17, 2008, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Due to the large number of entries, I won't be commenting on each piece but will certainly be reading and rereading them all. I wanted to thank you for your entry here, I hope to have the contest judged fairly soon...
al -
I really like this - just goes to show the strength and sureness of damage the mouth holds.
Best wishes in the contest,
Stacy
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amazing
i love this!
it's beautifully worked and worded.
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lol...I love how you suprise the reader so easily with your beautiful endings. Each read has such a soft touch to them. They become addicting. Best to you in the contest.
Kelli
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a fantastic metaphor here, makes me think of some rich people who have lost all their innocence and enthousiasm ... no stars in their eyes ...
a masterpiece !
maa
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This is fun
The last two lines go BOOM!
The reader, well, this one anyway,has room to read and re-read it, with different interpretations, based on examining that last line.
It remains a tiny, tight still-life, but with room to expand for the reader. Okay, yeah, I'm drunk, but I REALLY like it!
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Different. Yeah, it does suit the theme. And it does speak volumes through things and not through ideas. Pretty good one, Mal.
- namita
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hm different take, but speaks volume, good luck in the contest..
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