The daffodils
bloom each spring
at the fence
where you leaned
to sip my cool lemonade.
A contest entry
- The Red Wheelbarrow by AJ Morelli.
1500 points, ended March 17, 2008, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
all comments would be greatly appreciated
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right now the daffodils are blooming around campus... wonderful to have patches of bright color amid the green and brown, bare branches.
love how this piece builds up, and sort of sneaks up on you. also, the image of leaning on the fence sipping lemonade and the impact of "my" is great. and how daffodils sort of "lean" in a way.
just wonderfully done, lovely piece. -
Due to the large number of entries, I won't be commenting on each piece but will certainly be reading and rereading them all. I wanted to thank you for your entry here, I hope to have the contest judged fairly soon...
al -
This does evoke thoughts of reminiscing, and of the pleaure this reminiscing can bring. An enjoyable poem.
peace
doug
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oh...I really like this one..something a little reminiscent about it, for sure....I love how the daffodils are so much like 'cool lemonade'..and those places we look and see where we once stood, perhaps, (usually, with another)...reminding you of that person, also, I like how daffodils are perennials bulbs, and come back each spring - bringing those memories with it.. a nice moment here, wonderful imagery ...best of luck in the contest.
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Nice poem. Daffodils are beautiful.
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I like the picture this evokes when I read it.
It is nice the way the words just flow together.
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cute
cute short write on love in bloom . . liked "bloom each spring" and "to sip my cool lemonade" . . good luck in the contest
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Lovely write about the daffodils. I wrote a poem titled "daffodils". You may check it out.
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Love the image your words so delicately paint. Very well written. Good luck in the contest. I enjoyed the read.
Kelli -
Nice write. Daffodils are the beautiful flowers. They bloom the early spring.
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