Every time I looked around,
you were right by my side.
But you never stopped amazing me
at how dense you could be.
All I really wanted
was you to watch over me.
But every time I looked at you,
I only saw your back.
Oh Brother,
How could you not see
Oh Brother
what I needed you to be?
I never wanted you to leave,
never wanted you to go.
You were my friend, my heart, my kin,
and I watched you walk away.
Oh Brother,
How could you not see
Oh Brother
what I needed you to be?
You always
told me to be strong.
And I never
left your side.
You made me
promise not to cry.
And I did it.
I didn't cry.
Oh Brother,
How could you not see
Oh Brother
what I needed you to be?
Oh Brother,
How could you not see
Oh Brother
what I needed you to be?
You told me to be strong.
And I did it.
I didn't cry.
Author notes
Now that I've written it, it sounds very much like a song.... It's about my best friend who didn't realize how much he meant to me before he took off for the Army. And I'm pretty sure he's not coming back.
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Wow. This is a very painful poem, and yes it does read like a song more then anything else. But one can also feel some love in the poem, though that is a surprise. It is beautifully written, and I hope that you are wrong and he does return.
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this is a very strong poem
i love this alot but i feel so bad that you have given
up hope it hurts my heart to read your note...
my husband is in Iraq for the second time and he has
watched to much for his time but i know that he will
always make it back for he has my heart and i feel
like you should not give up and stay strong for him
thank you for entering!!
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Done. Sorry.
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this poem is deep, i like the way you put so much emotion into it, my hun is in the army and i thank god he comes home everyday, you are strong if you really didnt cry, i would be crying my eyes out, this is really deep and has a great impact on me, i also like the background choice, good luck in the contest and keep writing, -Amy
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wow... this is a poem from the heart... i wish so many people could write like this...there would be many more better poets out there... i trely enjoyed this deep peice... its beauty... i love the reptition... i feel like it shows the repeat feelings when the man you love is away.... ike everyday just repeats itself... like every day you ask the same questions of
Oh Brother,
How could you not see
Oh Brother
what I needed you to be?
wonderful
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the worst thing to feel is that he isnt coming home. have faith
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aww sissy wow
this must hurt im sorry you do
much love & blessings
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