Don’t try to save me
There is nothing you can do
It’s really not that hard to see
You broke my heart in two
With this pain I feel inside
That will never go away
It’s hard for me not to hide
Though I know I cannot stay
And every time I think of you
A tear falls down my cheek
I know there is nothing I can do
I cannot even speak
Even though I want to say
How much you mean to me
I know that in some way
You will never even see
I know that it is true
My heart will never be the same
After everything we’ve been through
Your love I can never again claim
A contest entry
- I wanna hear about pain.... by boydamaged.
550 points, ended March 3, 2008, 24 entries
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Comments
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thats beautiful and sad!
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wow! this was real simple yet with such great meaning and amazing depth! Your last stanza was powerful with emotions... great flow with imagery! this reminded of my stlye of writing!
Anyways, your rhyme was pretty good as well!
Thank you very much for this entry! Best wishes!
Much love always,
Ranji
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Ahh. a broken heart poem. They break my heart everytime I read them, so sad. Just remember in time this too shall pass, give it time.
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Awwww....sad. Really well written.
"And every time I think of you
A tear falls down my cheek
I know there is nothing I can do "
That was my fave part. Totally been there.
Great job and thanks for entering.
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that was a well writen peom! this was the best peom I read today enjoyed it.
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Sad, but very very well written. Excellently crafted. I enjoyed the read very much. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Kelli -
A good write--Very well written and has a good flow to it--Best of luck in the contest!!
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