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image: freefall, sideways to the left

 

 

 

 

 

a dead bird
wears feathers inside its life
 
while every man has two fathers
and every woman,
                         two mothers
 
only one is commonly noticed
 
 
 
I hold both while touching
neither-
 
like the sky and a falling
wing,
each blessing comes wrapped
in a curse
 

 
invert that pairing
and the answer falls the same,
 
the loudest bones
scream beneath hushed skin,
so quiet,
so close to another side of silence,
empty enough
to swallow the perfect noise,
those beautiful lies we sing ourselves
to grab another day
 
 
everyone is in denial
about something
 

 

all growth comes deliberately,
an active expression of will,
 
in letting our secret life
sound through
 
we find ourselves heard

only when we listen
 
 
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Faithbound gold member
    March 5

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    I truly enjoyed this. Your breaks were perfect and the whole tone of the piece was perfect. You should check out the contests I'm running. I am adding another later today. Your style is great. I am going to bookmark this so when I have more time later I can go read more of your work.

  • Elora Danon gold member
    March 4

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    ah Kate, where to begin?

    this piece is so very delicate i want to cradle it in the palm of my hands. it twists and writhes and sighs so quietly, i almost feel i need to lean in to hear it.

    "all growth comes deliberately"

    isn't that the absolute truth? whether we move forward ourselves or we're propelled by other factors, our growth as sentient beings is never accidental. it's what we do with that growth, that experience that makes us who we are.

    "everyone is in denial
    about something"

    perhaps, but i'll tell you this - i don't ever want to be denied the beauty and strength in your work and your words.

    they are inspiration incarnate - and how lucky we are to read them.

    thank you my dear for your talent and your brilliance.

    becky

  • While I don't quite understand the beginning, I really, really like the end. Good job. Keep it up.


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    March 2

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    A kaleidoscope of images, really, but all point inside to fix the outside. At least for me.




  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 1

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    i found it a twisting vine around an already fragile spirit, that can hear whispers of things to come and the past too... all is relevant and universal, when we all crave that thought of love and commonality..

    terrific piece of work Kate...



    Gill.x


  • Jaden silver member
    March 1
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    Interesting images throughout . . . but the ending is great. Good job.

  • michael thomas
    February 29

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    Your thoughts are sublime. The spell of your heart opening up in poetry opens our hearts as the reader. The tight pattern of words makes the poem live with so much meaning. The idea of two parents - one visible and one that we wish for/hide/strive-to-be, has always intrigued me since I live my life becoming what my parents could not become. I relish the idea that I am more than my parents ever imagined. In time, what we become can never be understood by our parents since they keep us fixed in their dream with their peer limitations. I feel that your poetry is saturated with such rich longing to be more that what you are. With such striving, you can never fail because your words make us more than what we were after reading them.


  • Namita silver member
    February 29

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    This is just amazing... Kate, Kate- I LOVE THIS.

    "a dead bird
    wears feathers inside its life

    while every man has two fathers
    and every woman,
    two mothers
    only one is commonly noticed"

    Your poem LIVES. Your poetry is ALIVE. It has a SOUL. And that, that life comes from all those amazing images. A part of soulfulness in you is there in your poetry too.

    Whether you understood or not, I love this one. And just love the spacing in the beginning.

    - namita


  • Fug-azi
    February 29

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    Well you have completly lost me in this write and even though I don't see the meaning I can still appreciate the flow of words and emotions .. I expect your meaning is staring me in the face and I'm just looking straight through it.

    Its realy good, but I expect nothing else from you.


  • Tirrell
    February 29
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    Quite dramatically beautiful, love the scope of subtext, this is a great write! Beautiful verse.

  • Truer words were never heard

    Yikes! I hope that sounds the way I meant it!


  • Annalise
    February 29

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    I am not in a commenting mood at this particular moment... but I wanted to throw you a quick note to let you know I like this. A lot.

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