You believe that I am innocent
In the way that means the most
But you don't really know
That I've done it more than once
You believe that I could never kill
Anybody no matter what
But you don't really know
That I plot many murders daily
You believe that I am religious
Only believing in God
But you don't really know
That I am also a werewolf
You don't know
Who I am inside
Because you do not see
You're heart is blind.
Author notes
'Mummy your looking at me but your not really seeing me'
A contest entry
- Please Look at Me! by Sorath.
600 points, ended March 8, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round one (for everyone) prewrite contest ENTER ENTER ENTER (AND YES THAT MEAN'S YOU too by serenity silvermoon.
927 points, ended February 16, 1509 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
-
This was really good, i could really relat to this, my parents don't know a lot about me either
great write....xxx
-
This is good. Very mysterious, but it brings you to want to finish the poem. Some writings you are easily bored with because their is lack of mystery and this means less to you. You opened up here and there as you saw need for, which was very good, and you used a deep voice thru out this peice, which really brought it to life. It showed that at the moment you were feeling secretive in a shadowed kind of way... very good poem!
-
Thank you for entering! The line about being a werewolf made me smile. I liked your shade of mystery of not saying exactly what you've done but you know. SNEAKY!! Don't try to do it too much because then people will try to find hidden meanings in your work and go crazy when there is none AHH. Anyway..
Good Luck! -
-
yeah... it's not all true, but I wrote for the generality of other teens.
-
Adding your comment:
