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The Ocean

I could never refine or define
These waves of feelings
You send flowing through me.
With the strength of the ocean at high tide,
They send me crashing into you.

I'll wash up on to your shore
And like where the waves meet the sand,
The touch of your hand
Sends chills, and I realize:

I could never explicitly or with simplicity state
How your gaze captures me
Anchoring its way into my heart.
I find myself lost in a sea
Of brilliant green beauty.

And please don't throw me a line,
I don't wish to be rescued...

I can brace these storms of love
And face the raging racing hearts,
The winds of heavy breathing,
And calms of inhaling and exhaling in unison.

I could never easily or clearly express
That I need to sense your touch, experience your gaze,
and feel your warm kisses fall around me
AS much as the ocean depends on the rain.

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  • Touchof1der silver member
    May 24, 2008

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    Your poetry is simple and beautiful from beginning to end and a pure pleasure to savor. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors. Keep that pen handy and ever ready for use dear poet.
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • xxTheRadFreakxx
    May 23, 2008
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    awww. this is such a beautiful out look on love and the ocean! i love this line..

    I could never easily or clearly express
    That I need to sense your touch, experience your gaze,
    and feel your warm kisses fall around me
    AS much as the ocean depends on the rain.

    this is so cutee XD

    xxfreak.


  • Blood Bloom
    May 21, 2008
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    oh. This is so sweet and beautiful.


  • darreniscold
    March 3, 2008

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    I like the metaphor of this poem..I think I am going to steal it and write my own poem. Though I think I will make it be more like the tides..coming in and then being pushed out repeatedly.


  • Ithica silver member
    February 29, 2008

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    This is filled with gorgeous imagery... The emotional tone speaks to the mystery that is love... Great read, thank-you!

  • Zyskandar A Jaimot
    February 29, 2008
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    great metaphors/allusions through-out sublime ending thanks for sharing regards zaj


  • Angel Baby88
    February 29, 2008
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    I like this poem alot!!!!when i read the title of the poem i just had to read it!


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 29, 2008

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    Great metaphor used throughout these lines; liked the flow, alliteration and the images that come to mind when reading this. Wonderful way to end this poem too.


  • MissyMouse
    February 29, 2008

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    Beautiful. AS much as the ocean depends on the rain.

    You show the undying love between these two people. The need to have one another like the need for water. An unsatiable thirst. Very well written.

    ~Amy

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