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Tree of Heaven

Sitting across a table

held so many old women

everyone spoke about

their wedding day

the greastest hapiness

then came my turn

 

 

 

"Autumn dropped its little gold into
my pond amber hair
a lover’s time when a women
would gave her heart to a man
and the man would give his to her
the softest rain drops
a written song
“yes peace swayed leaves
and trees danced freely”

embedded beads of buds
upon my toes
from my windows still
to my pathway, bloomed
on mattress fields of red
the air had wings
breathe of lily doves
Oh I heard one spoke
"Bless the Lord"

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soon

sister blossomed fresh bundle
of amber flora curls with
kind notion as window
smiled in warm rays
and I heard the window sing
glorious songs of CeCe Winins
or perhaps that was
my sweet mother as she
zipped my back
and another sweet hand
of my sister placed
pink blushed upon my
cheeks
left it to become
the morn little mirror

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later
then

ever so waiting I was
for my man my love
as I ever felt so beautiful

that day--
he came
the beauty that dripped
from his eyes were
not as close to any sunset
or rain--

a fast breeze
blinking so many
as I saw my man

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We both vowed in small

spoken voice then he placed

a radiant flora upon my

finger

 

as he slide it there

I imagined when onced I

jot a poetic poem on a

yellow linen page as I sat

on a white chair on this feild

it had left my hand and brushed

into the wind pass this very

feild into the lake,

 

 

so began a new time

 

I looked up as another gold had fell
from some tree else where
 but saw no tree
"oh tree of heaven" I said

 

so happen he was kissing me

and I didn't know"

 

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  • Amera gold member
    March 29

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    This is beautiful and absolutly captivating. Your vocabulary and imagery grabbed me as the reader like a vice! Good luck come judging time.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Celticjedi
    August 6, 2008

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    Interesting is definitely the word to use. This was well woven with amazing thought and sweet descriptions. Wonderful job. Thank you for entering, and good luck.
    ~Cj

  • Flying Phoenix
    June 17, 2008

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    This is a very intersting poem. Beautiful and sweet. I got what you meant for most of it. The title and the piece work well together. Good luck

  • New-n-Improved
    April 20, 2008
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    This Was Interesting

    I think that this is a marvelous piece of work that should be considered art. You really put your words together very good and I was able to follow along with every line and visualize what I was reading. That is good. That is great. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.


  • Rele anmwe
    March 29, 2008

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    This is a beautiful poem you have here. though, it has some grammar error, meaning tenses and so on. You need to fix those things. I want you to keep on writing your thoughts with a sense of ease, once you do that, everything will then fall into place. You have the talent and the will, but perfection is what you are lacking of. You need to stop slacking, you are a gifter writer. Write for me

  • Honeydew
    March 9, 2008
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    very nice

    this is very lovely..thank you for your entry.

  • Liquid memories
    March 2, 2008

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    such a delightful caring tree in heaven. the way you shared this, soft with feelings and tenderness. well done. success in the contest.


  • z etoile
    February 29, 2008

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    Change the greastest hapiness to the greatest happiness...

    Wow the metaphores in this piece are amazing


  • Chaos Inside
    February 29, 2008

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    OMG!! wow, this was so beautifully written. the imagery that this created in my mind was so lovely. great job!

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