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the end

this breath will be the last for me.
i can no longer live this life.
i hate it more now than ever.
the anger i hide, the anger inside its wanting to come out of me

so run and hide your little eyes, and sing your melody.
for this breath will be my last

shrot and sweet..... i like it

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  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 7, 2008
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    A powerful and intense piece. Very well penned hunni, sorry it is short, gotta dash. Superb!


  • andywontdie silver member
    March 4, 2008

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    hmm, this sounds a lot like the the poem i just posted, the breath parts. short and to the point thanks for sharing and keep on pening!


  • InMyFlames
    March 3, 2008

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    whoa great work, i can see it came from the heart. It is easy to relate to, i like that great write keep it up!! (o whatever happen to how talk) hope you remember me


  • Broken-hearted Hero
    February 29, 2008

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    Its beautiful just beautiful, it is really good althought it is really short.......... hate to say it but there is one flaw you kanda misspelled little


  • N e a r
    February 29, 2008

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    Dang, this is intense for only 6 lines. Chilling as well. I've experienced these feelings before, and I hate it when that does occur.. Dark and emotional. Nicely done.

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