I woke up this morning, Reached out to touch you.
Found myself all alone in my bed.
Then I came to the realization
That last night was all in my head.
The sweet love that we made was merely me dreaming
But baby, it seemed so true.
The mind can bring you such wonderful pleasures,
But reality can make you blue.
The dream was so vivid, I felt I was with you.
Your kisses, they tasted so sweet.
The look in your eyes, the sound of your voice
Oh baby, my dream was a treat.
I want you to know that I do truly love you.
And baby, I wish it was true.
I wish we could share those wonderful pleasures.
I want to make love to you.
Someday, my darling, we will be together.
Someday the time will be right.
We’ll hold one another, never to let go.
Our future will be oh so bright.
Someday will get here, I just don’t know when.
Till then dear, our dreams must do.
Someday we’ll share those wonderful pleasures.
Then I will make love to you.
Yes someday soon, baby, we’ll be together.
Then I will make love to you.
A contest entry
- Free write & Pre-written allowed!!! Anyone can enter!! by StarDustedTears3.
319 points, ended March 3, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
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I really liked your penning, mostly cause I really can relate to this peice, as my fiance is over seas at work. And I miss everything about him... good penning and exspression in this poem.
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This is pretty good, the feelings are great but the flow is off. I think a little more work could greatly improve this poem. Thanks for entering.
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dreams can be so real sometimes can't they? Then we wake and it's all gone...poof! Thank you for your entry. I felt the rhyme stumble a bit but otherwise it was nice.
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Oh I really liked this piece; you did a fantastic job on the emotion and feeling. I love the flow the words were put together vary well! To me it had a lyrical quality to it! I like that most about it.
I hate to say this though; the poem seems more of a longing to be, other then you actually being a couple. So it doesn’t fit in the contest as well as we would like.
But don’t get me wrong this is a FANTASIC poem and you did a great job on it. I really wish it would have fit better, this has extreme potential!
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I was very much impressed by this poem and loved the flow. It sent tingles up and down my spine. Good luck in the contest!
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I really do like this one!!! U r going to be added to the finalists list!!
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Wonderful flow here and a beautiful poem.I enjoyed the read.
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