January winds left her lovely heart cold
As they said she would never love again
Spring flowers bloomed color in delight
As so found her fondness of me in sight
Summer's breeze filled days long & warm
Love grew like tall grass in the meadows
Our days and nights as one so complete
Silent understanding spoken in low key
A time for tranquility and harmony shared
My life my love my once in a lifetime gift
Fall winds arrived too soon for us
As they were harsh and full of bad news
The angels came for her today
My eyes are swelled and blinded now
As rivers of tears flow their course
I took her place as in January's cold
Never to love again without remembering
Colors blending into the landscape of beauty
A summer's breeze once in time
No desire to move nor breathe today
Welcome angels come for me now
Heal a frozen heart this winter's night
Be with her everlasting star light
And the seasons of love once known
A contest entry
- Make me burst out in tears with your words by KaseyL.
600 points, ended May 9, 2008, 84 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh My!!
This is sad
Powerful verse of Love and Loss but the Love still there~~ as tears fall
Oy~ What a picture...Gorgeousssssssss
Beautifully penned my Friend!
Love this!!
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Oh and can I just say how much I LOVE that picture?
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Thank you! I love it too! Don
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I agree with Kasey.. if it were longer I would have cried. Hell, I came awfully close.
Don't take this as a criticism or suggestion that you should change it because it isn't. But this seems like it could be a very interesting and vivid piece if it was done in more detail of the seasons.
"took her place in January
Never to love again"
So sad...
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Thank you for the constructive comment my dear! I agree with your tip also on expressing the seasons more in the poem. I'll do some thinking on more expression in the write. Don
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This is beautiful. It is sad and haunting. Great job with this! I couldn't choose a favorite part, because all of it flows together so well.
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Thank you my dear for the great comment on my poem! Happy you liked it, Don
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This is quite sad...I think I would have ended up crying if it were longer. Beautifully written. Uniquely written. I enjoyed this. Great job.
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Thank you KaseyL!! I Was thinking of limiting the length. Maybe I should have got into it deeper huh. Sad is tough on me cuz I feel what I write. Happy you enjoyed it though! Don
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