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What Blossoms is Pain

Loving you has left me,
barren like desert.
Eroded feelings,
that hurt like thorns.
What blossoms is pain,
drenched by my tears,
that substitute rain.

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  • viksonly4u
    March 6, 2008

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    wow....very very well summarised and well written and expressed the true emotions invovled with pain....grt work... u deserve every bit of appreciation....keep up the good work....


  • only1love4ever
    March 3, 2008
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    Wow, this struck home in a way i didnt think possible. It's like watching your friend drive away on a move, standing there drenched in the rain, crying but not noticeable, as the rain streams down your face and washes away your tears. I love how you said Drenched by my tears, THat substitute rain.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    February 29, 2008
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    this happens so often, the substitute of pain is rain, nice description for tears, thank you for this nice entry, good luck..Moons


  • Kelli Marie
    February 28, 2008

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    A very well written piece of poetry. Great imagery throughout. I think you did a great job. Good luck.
    Kelli

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