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Vultures

Polka dotted black and blue
against the bright sunny day
radiant beams radiate from the heavens
blocked momentarily by wings in flight

My happiness is sucked out abruptly
as quickly as the sun dissapears
my joy vanishes into the darkness
as I stumble and lay there for a while

I will get up eventually
Though vultures circle overhead
blocking out any form of hope
The lord will give me strength -- to go on




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  • light to a dreamer gold member
    February 28, 2008
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    Nice work

    Great wording and flow, And this is very true and hope is the way to make you look up.