If life is a wheel
Then I'll wait for it to turn,
As change cannot be still
Lest I forever mourn.
If life is a day
Then night may soon pass through,
For if this feeling will stay
I'll remain forever blue.
How do you like the poem?
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I loved this. I have to agree with previous comments - this was an excellent way to put time heals all wounds.
Write on.
~*~
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Liked the flow of these lines, the sentiments expressed and the message shared. Easy to read and understand what you are saying here. Good thing the wheel keeps turning and the days keep passing - each new hours and new days brings something new and can make life much happier.
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this is very cleverly written and it says so much in simple wording that is effectivly used. well done with this
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A very clever way to state the simple fact that time heals all wounds, and that even this shall pass. The rhyme is seamless and the metaphor clear.
until exhale,
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I love the hope that is held within the broken heart and though this is a short write it is very poignant. Even in the sadness of the heart which lies broken I can still feel its strength. Excellent analogies on life and a smooth flow. Good luck in the contest. This one should place. It speaks loudly to the heart and still remains soft. Thank you for sharing with me and keep writing poet. seamaiden ♥
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Very well written, really liked the thoughts in this.
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Wise poem!
The beauty in this wise poem is how it was so cleverly
written touching our souls with air and a beautiful
innervoice prose.
WEll done! very well done!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : ))))))))))
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very good cute ending
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thanks
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