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Hope

Watch closely
One flash
Bringing hope
Where light is missing

Then gone
Leaving only darkness

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  • N e a r
    February 28, 2008

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    Hmmm. This is a good write, especially with the commanding tone that's given. "Watch closely" : great beginning. I feel it's an excellent hook, and really makes the reader want to focus on the detail yet not too much incase something might slip by. I like it how it shifts in the concept at the end when the light is gone and only darkness remains. Pretty good.