in this reality
my being is meaningless
a simple untouchable thought
that you can not see
sense that your minds don't know
everything that your eyes don't show
a world beyond your souls
past all your role-played lives
through a path were nothing but hatred an pain arrives
what a choice that was
when i gave my life
to be something other than sane
an pity all your useless gains
so i can live on your doubts
an thrive on your shame
to except that my happiness
had never came.....
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(i know what it means to me)
CrimsonRazorBlade
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So, I'd make a longer comment but I'm like uber busy right now so... Just wanted to let you know I read it.
A lot of times I feel like I'm not important ever and I'm just this useless part of society.
(wow...i could be emo, couldn't i
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Ugh... but it's true. I feel awful.
I really liked this write.
Deepness.
Sincerely,
sarah ~
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this does have a sence of deepness
i can feel the heart but i dont feel that you added as
much as you could
but an overall good poem!!!
thank you for entering!!
**kat -
Username please*
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to be something other than sain
an pity all your useless gains
so i can live on your doubts
an thrive on your shame
to except that my happiness
had never came.....
Change sain to sane...otherwise, perfect!
And you're 14?
Holy smokes, quite insightful for one so young. Amazing stuff!
thank you so much for entering, and best wishes to you!
Peace!
jin
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i corrected the miss spell thx for leting me know an thx im glade u think so....
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wow that had amazing flow!!
this poem just made me think and i've now just read it three times and still don't know what it means to me.
but its very deep and very meaningful. you did an amzing job!! [[it would make awesome lyrics]] [[message me for the reason y i added that]]
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This is poured out from the depths of your soul and I embrace every word little brother
Very well penned! Let that pen guide you!
Peace and Love
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thankies sisy
it just came to me while i was in school 
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My favorite line
"sense that your minds don't know
everything that your eyes don't show"
Written in shades of darkness and pain.Kinda sad.
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I forgot the applause!
Stupid-I-Am
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I love your poetry Joshie-(insert one syllable word here)
Such a good write. Short, but to the point. Which is the kind of poetry I like. Unline mine, long, and dragging onto the point haha. But yea anyway, Rhyming was great, structure was good. Very nice -
This is really sad. It's so good though! I really like it! All of this pain and anguish! This is a very great write.
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