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The Poet Obscure (terza rima #3)


He may not have the gift of high allusion,
quotes and references to texts obscure
recorded with compulsory profusion.

Perhaps he'd rather find a natural scheme
where words and metaphors come more sincerely,
requiring no exegetic scrawl.

He may not use strong images so nearly
as often as the modernists demand
is vital for a poem to be clearly

more than just a monologue of mind,
for he'll make use of other strong devices
that let him deftly transmit all he means.

He may not ramble on of sacrifices
he's made throughout the years, and what he feels
the world should know of all his strengths and vices.

He might instead decide he'd rather fold
his tales and meditations in the hearses
of dead and dying tenors to the fields.

He may not give his all enjambing verses
haphazardly across each random page,
every line chopped as he disperses

strong opinion, malcontent and pain,

for he may see the line bearing notions
beyond the norms imposed by donnish pride.

He may not feel romanced by Greek devotions
nor feel inclined to scatter Roman lore
throughout the lexicon of his emotions.

A broader range of histories may lure
his thought to ponder cultural connections
rooted in the loam of distant lives.

He may not share the common predilections
of using poetry as but a means
to push his politics in all directions

and further what agendas rule his mind,
for he may have no motive but to travel
through landscapes green with self-development.

He may not heed the rap of fashion's gavel
and follow every statute set by fad,
accepting precedents as laid in gravel.

He might be more inclined to stray afar
from sooty highways, trampled by convention,
on subtle paths that lead to mystic finds.

He may not raise his hackles at the mention
of making use of meter, maybe rhyme,
filled with indignation, rage and tension

to think on prosody, semantic rules,
for he may sense mysterious potential
swelling deep beneath that censured realm,
waiting to be seen as quintessential
to evolutions ever influential.

 

 

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  • max337
    June 21
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    I liked this a lot.

  • Thomas Scott gold member
    June 20

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    Bravo!

    Love the craftsmanship and the theme.

    " ... rap of fashion's gavel ... "
    Luvit.

    Very polished stuff.

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    • Zahhar gold member
      June 21
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      Ah yes, I've been fined for disorderly conduct in the court of poetic convention many a time.
  • By the way ...

    after rereading this the other day, I decided to use terza rima with a villanelle form to write a poem. It's called Daughters of Achelous. I got a Gold on it too.

    Anyway, thanks for the inspiration to use the form again.
  • I thought...

    that this describes many writers of past and present, we who do not think of rules, semantics, forms... We who write what we think might make the reader feel what we feel, or what we wish them to feel, or what, more precisely, makes US feel what we feel, hoping the reader might feel as we do.

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  • Ah. This food is very rich for thought


    This is like dark dark chocolate. Must enjoy a little at a time.


  • Ink Shadow
    April 1
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    This is brilliant, one of the better poems I have read at this site.

    D


  • Serene
    March 30

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    A WINNER!

    A fine piece with fine usage of vocabulary, it just seem to flow with thoughts of a peot's obscure. A real masterpiece!! Congratulations of well deserved win!!

    Rena~

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  • myrataal silver member
    March 30

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    This is a worthy silver ...

    it once again challenged me to test my own poetic intentions to each stanza ... and once again I came to the conclusion that each poet should bring to the page the phrasings of his own voice, in his own style, and enticed to do so by his own Muse.

    Although we may follow some proformas it is in the end more valuable to write true to own core.

    I enjoyed reading these thoughts, so neatly penned in refined words.

    Blessed be.
    Myra

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  • JWGoethe
    March 4

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    A poet once responded to the question "what does this poem mean?' He replied, when I wrote it, both God and I knew. Now, God only knows. This is once of the most daring, creative, and profound works I've yet read on this site. I am deeply impressed.
  • a great entry, and well thought out...or maybe youre brilliant enough to just make this up as you went.
    a nice job with your vocabulary also

    i also like the fact the "he" is not glorified, merely observed, and yet with such obsevances come a longing from the reader to want to be like whomever this "he" is...at times, even i was like...hmmmm....is he kissing my ass? and then i re-humbled myself and commenced back to a judges point of view....but i bet i am not the only one

    all in all, i hope your work becomes exposed to narrow eyes

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  • mjlovestheatlantic gold member
    February 29
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    Great jo
  • Rediscover
    February 28
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    prove
  • Rediscover
    February 28
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    Astonishing

    You are a very deep thinking man with an incredible talent. Your studies have proven you Poet Laureate. This is incredible, your words proove you have gone beyond all the beginning steps. You have taught me a great deal here. Who Is "He"?

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  • ecrivain01 silver member
    February 28

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    Whoa ...

    my mind is reeling. That's not just a mouthful, it would choke a horse. I am not sure, but I think you might have just founded a new school of philosophical thinking.

    Interesting way of writing, employing the third person that way. I am not sure I've ever done it, but I might think about it sometime, just because I read this poem. I'm fond of terza rima, but rarely use it myself. I think I have one poem here using that particular form. Seems like I remember Frost was fond of it, and that's why I wrote that one.

    Anyway, this is certainly a tour de force. Magnifique. C'est tout qu'il faut dire.

    Thanks for the chance to read this. Now I'll be waking up all night long thinking, wait, what did that mean? (Just kidding).

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