I've taken to wearing gloves, like surgeon's.
D'you know they're easy ripped? The slightest nip,
and a cap cuts whole fingers off!
Anyway the point is...less obvious now.
Let's just say...my 'prints are all over
this bloody place, tips covering the walls.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- inspiration en masse. by unraveled.
800 points, ended March 18, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Picture Prompt: "I am NOT green and purple!" - so you say! by J.P.Troy.
900 points, ended April 17, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
tell me exactly what you think; no holds barred!
Comments
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Wow! amazing how you did with the gloves...dark and gritty
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Your poem certainly keeps the reader curious, even after they have finished reading. Well done!
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thanks!
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I liked this one. It seems a bit shocking and stoical. It fits in well with the title. Good job
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Contest: Picture Prompt: "I am NOT green and purple!" - so you say! by JP.Troy
Not a hundred per cent sure how this relates to my contest topic. However, this reminds me of one of my favourite films which is about an art heist. Probably not your intention, but the ambiguous wording fits that scenario for me. I enjoyed it.
Thank you for entering this contest. Good luck.
J.P. Troy
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Interesting write. Twists and turns and lets the reader take on whatever thougth crosses their mind. You lead them but do not tell them. Allowing them a wide spectrum. Nicely done. Best of luck to you in the contest.
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i will get a brand new hanky for you, it can be used to wipe everything down, there will be no prints left, a good poem.
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accessory!
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don't knowhat caps means
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I like that ambiguity, Matt
lookitup, mate!
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Well, i think it looks good.
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that's my kind of scribble
(just what I wanted, praise la 'Dia)
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I like the reword.
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note to self (hoping you'll scribble on the sides)
not messing with it ANYMORE (until the contest is over) besos -
I like all the help I'm getting from you, and Yvette, and now corrughagh...good vibes catching on
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Cool as. Do you allude to the 1970's show Branded with chuck connors... maybe not..
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thanks! brandalizer!
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I'm not certain about 'covered on these bloody walls.'
it's reading awkward (for me, which is just as likely because i can't read )
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heheh, at this time, I'm having trouble writing!
thought 'covering' but will decide manána
[edit] rewind!
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haha
I love the double meaning I get from this.
bloody being the key to it ..
clever, let me know when you add to it
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I've saved my revisions
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Darn, I love a poetess that can handle her liquor, loves CR and asks for no holds barred thoughts.
Like the write, it's thought provoking but wondered whether it could be pared down, tightened like the abs after childbirth so that only a certain amount of breath is inhaled/exhaled
perhaps
I wear surgical gloves
sheer latex
that rips
at the fingertips
if dealing with gnashing teeth
the points
are lost
leaving a bloody trail
of two sets of fingerprints
please feel free to delete my rambling thoughts, they were offered with the wonderful liberty of knowing you like to discuss poetry
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I'm going Cleo' on Sunday...I've bought an eye-pencil, and everything!
Aloha C.R.A.S!!! my man loves all the peeps in me
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Lmao that you are going Cleo' on Sunday, not sure whether to say cool or kohl
Of course your man loves all the peeps inside his beloved oblong!
Happy Mothers day for tomorrow btw
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kohl is T H E E old-skool is new-skool cool, so let's say Yay!
thank you! I'm going onna granny-finding mission with my No.1 Son before showing the oblong to my Hon' all through Sunday nite (with no guilt for the next day's lazy lie-in), as I've been on a train and eating cake with all the generations alive called my blood-ties!
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The system glitches wouldn't allow me to applaud your reply
Lol at the granny-finding mission, a club near me holds over 25 nites and calls them grab a granny nites! Oh my!
No, don't feel a single twinge of anything except pleasure and soft sighs of ob-long-ish content-ment
Yay for the cake and the way cool new-skool, if that train ride was anything like News Eve Celebrations then pass me a chocolate eclair please, an iron bru' and pump up the volume lol
It's so nice to have reasons to celebrate with those on the same train and travel the same tracks!
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iron-bru!! good for a hangover...you know it !
pump up the volume=taking me back (to my roots), Champ
2 Right!
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'Champ!
haha! I love how you take the metaphor, and make it your own!
[edit] present tense, dahlng
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