Gazing into your eye
Makes me feel like I can fly
Tells me things I would never know
Takes me places I don’t want to go
I don’t want to walk the streets
I start counting my heart’s beats
I don’t want to see the fights you have been in
Or see people committing sin
I don’t want to join the clubs
Or see people doing drugs
Your eyes have a story to tell
About places you have been
And the things you have seen
In this world some call Hell
A contest entry
- Quickie - Death, Sympathy or Dark by MysticalRayne.
425 points, ended March 3, 2008, 10 entries
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Comments
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really good rhyme
the flow seamed a little forced at one point but other wise REALLY good. -
This was a very origianl and interesting take on this prompt. I adore this particular part :
Your eyes have a story to tell
About places you have been
And the things you have seen
In this world some call Hell
Beacuse this can be soooooooo true. Best of luck in the contest
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We all gaze into them...
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