Seeing is Believing
eyes piercing the sight
His hands on your body
caressing the spots
So my hands told me
[Betrayal is Death]
Covered with blood
the thoughts in my hands
I enjoyed every second
of ripping you apart.
Author notes
prompt
3) My bloody hands told me
8-10lines.
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author= luna-midnight
A contest entry
- PIF Prompt Contest 8 to 10 lines by Cerulean Sunrise.
470 points, ended February 29, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PRE-WRITES! ROUNDS CONTEST!!! by Luminescence.
525 points, ended March 23, 2008, 176 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh wow... I loved this.. Thank you so much for entering and participating in my contest...
title- 10
diction- 10
syntax- 10
wowness factor- 10
total- 40 perfect score... automatic bump..
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mahaha
Lovely in its way. -
I like how you used the cliche saying in the first line then made such a impact on the reader with the rest of the poem's body... That is creative & original, my friend. And just WOW on that last part! "I enjoyed ever second / of ripping you apart". What a statement! This blew me away!
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Great!
I love a good dark write and this is great!!!!
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"[Betrayel is Death]
Covered with blood
the thoughts in my hands
I enjoyed every second
of ripping you apart."
Sweet revenge
Well penned!
Wish you the best in the contest!
~David~
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Once again, a kick-ass poem. i'm jealous of your talent
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