Take this life,
Throw it away.
Take this life,
Burn it away.
Take this life,
And use this blade.
Take this life,
And slice my veins!!
Take this life,
Let the blood rain.
Take this life
And I'll be slain.
Take this life,
And end my pain!!
Take this life,
And it won't be in vain.
A contest entry
- Emo/Cutting/Suicide by LostInTheDream.
500 points, ended March 18, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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dont do it brother
take it from the one who will jump at death as a child would jump at an ice-cream truck -
ooh, i love how you ended this poem. the repetitions worked for this piece, gave rise to a perfect flow. simple and realy hard-hitting write. keep penning
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Wow I like it!
Wow Felix Love this poem I love how you make the reader tink that's really a trick in poetry! Great work on this keep on writing! I love your poetry and your songs too.
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wow i like it!
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Was this the poem I was saposed to read? It's really powerful and it makes me sad.
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well done
I thought the rhyme was a little sticky at the beging but it got better and had great flow later in the poem.this is an awrsome poem.I really like it.
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wow
this was really good you put a lot of emotion into this piece very well done. I liked how you made the reader think.
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nice
yes...
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