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Untitled Haiku

Butterflies flutter
Behind sunset painted trees
I want to kill them

Author notes

"This is a great form of poetry
that flows from my thoughts,
though the picture I see is greater,
I have summed it all up beautifully in such short verse."

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  • Elentari
    March 4, 2008

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    Ha! That was enjoyable. So many haiku center on the beauty of nature; it was nice to see that concept turned on its head. Not everyone loves pretty little butterflies. That last line is just so startling and you can really feel the black mood of the "narrator" rolling off it. Nicely done.


    • WingedWolf
      March 5, 2008
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      yes, it is a great piece of work isn't it? not to be bragging or anything lol. I also love what i've done to the piece, because of just that. there's dark haikus and pretty haikus... why not mix them?

  • InBetweenThoughts
    February 28, 2008

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    Hmmmmmmmm, bad experience with the little critters? Lol..great imagery, form and counts...thank you for your entry..Ken IBT