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[ I love her, ]

I love her,
and the butterflies,
they're just so powerful,
no more lies,
im now successful,

I dream of her,
In my arms so warm,
I lay kisses on her lips,
and the bees start to swarm,
I even love her hips,

I care about her,
and it drives me crazy,
we dance in the night,
Im really not that lazy,
She fills me with plight,

I love her

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  • Lucille
    March 17, 2008

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    nicely written and very full of emotions
    its not writen like its a dream, its written like it is an experience that will never go away


  • tjj
    March 1, 2008
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    who just wandering it sounds like you truely deeply love her


    • Rize
      March 3, 2008
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      this girl i know...yeah i just cant get her out of my mind...shes even in my dreams...no not deep love...new love...i dont think it will ever truly be deep love again....thank you for your comment though...


  • Dirty and Broken
    February 28, 2008

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    i wish you only happiness....so..i truly hope you are happy with whoever you love....
    but i also wish you to know i did not lie when i said forever and always....i'm sorry

    • Rize
      March 28, 2008
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      okay...im a little slow, so please beg my pardon on this, but what is this supposed to mean???
      "but i also wish you to know i did not lie when i said forever and always....i'm sorry"

      What I mean is why did you say it..or internalize that the part about the lies were you???

      • Dirty and Broken
        March 30, 2008
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        it means i still love you, that i didn't lie when i said i would love you forever and always
        i said iw as sorry because....i am always sorry...to everyone
        i am not in love with you, so don't think that.....butpart of me do still love you.....so, yeah....that's what that meant....

        • Rize
          March 31, 2008
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          okay....but you dont need to be sorry to me....and i would never think that....what reason would i have to...please take no offense...

          • Dirty and Broken
            April 4, 2008
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            but i FEEL like i need to be sorry....i still always feel as if i need to be sorry......why should i take offense? there is nothing offenseive about that....


            • Rize
              April 13, 2008
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              well dont...not with me....i dont know...just reassurance

    • Rize
      February 29, 2008
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      the lies is on my part not yours....i thank you for your condolences....dont be sorry it is not your fault that the turn of events went the way they did...it happens and it hurts, but you have to eventually move forward in life to where you truly want to be...i hope you get there in your life with whimever it may be....thank you for your comment...i appreciate it...


  • Kelli Marie
    February 28, 2008

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    It is funny how sometimes love gives us butterflies and at other times bumble bees..this is a great write. I enjoyed it very much.
    Kelli

    • Rize
      February 29, 2008
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      thank you for your comment, i just happened to write it from my head onto paper...or the web....love is great....again thank you for your comment...

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