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What's in a Name

You say you're here to help
And you just want to console me
You say you've seen my hell
My strength you're extolling

You see my pen moving
The words pull you apart
You say that it's proving
That I still have a heart

Have you even looked around?
Can't you see I'm the joke of this whole town?
I had only one day
And I threw everything away
It's not as you claim. There's nothing to praise.

You feel their aggression

And see me stand firm

You think it a confession

And say that I can still learn

 

You tripped on the chains

Embedded in my mind

You were finally ashamed

What did you expect to find?

 

Did you even look at me?

How did you miss that they all just couldn't see

I had only one night

And I gave my whole life

You're all just the same. Did you even know my name? 

Author notes

Option 6 - Sixx A.M, Accidents Can Happen

Don't give up, it takes a while
I have seen this look before
And it's alright
You're not alone
If you don't love this anymore
I hear that you've slipped again
I'm here 'cause I know
you'll need a friend

And you know that accidents can happen
And it's okay,
We all fall off the wagon sometimes
It's not your whole life
It's only one day
You haven't thrown everything away.

Take some time and learn to breathe
And remember what it means
To feel alive
And to believe
Something more than what you see
I know there's a price for this
But some things in life you must resist

And you know that accidents can happen
And it's okay,
We all fall off the wagon sometimes
It's not your whole life
It's only one day
You haven't thrown everything away.

I hear that you've slipped again
I'm here 'cause I know
you'll need a friend

And you know that accidents can happen
And it's okay,
We all fall off the wagon sometimes
It's not your whole life
It's only one day
You haven't thrown everything away.

You know that accidents can happen
And it's okay,
We all fall off the wagon sometimes
It's not your whole life
It's only one day
You haven't thrown everything away.

So don't give up
It takes a while.


It was more of an answer to the lyrics, as in how I'd react if someone said these things to me - which someone has. I am so sick of people pretending to be concerned about me when they don't know the first thing about me.

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  • Kurai Namida
    March 7, 2008

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    wow. that was amazing.
    it left me nearly speechless.
    i'm completely jealous of the fact that you can write like this.
    This is an amazing piece of work.

    there's one stanza that just sticks in my mind, my favorite one.

    You tripped on the chains
    Embedded in my mind
    You were finally ashamed
    What did you expect to find?

    and again, i'm just completely wowed.


    • Kikai Ni
      March 7, 2008
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      >.< Don't be jealous. All poets write different, and I'm flattered that my style impressed you.
      ^.^ That was my favorite stanza, too; I like the transitional parts.
      THANK YOU!!!


  • Nobody Important
    March 6, 2008
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    Brilliant.Relatable , well written,

    • Kikai Ni
      March 6, 2008
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      Three words of praise and three times applauded.
      Thank you.


  • only1love4ever
    February 29, 2008

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    Truth be said...

    A total catastrophy or a total dream. A walk in heaven or a golden stream. Some people say everything you long to hear, other people say whatever will bring you near. Then there are others that really didnt care and for that matter don't long to be near. In a moment everything can change, they say that it can't and that you're the only one to blame. They say you can help the feelings you feel, the emotions you show and the the tears that you shed. They say we should all just be used to the pain, be used to the blame, get over your fears, grow up and mature, but how can they say these same things time and time again, when in all true reality, they don't know who you are, the heart you demand, the chains that hold you down, the sweet dreams you prance around, they don't know what is holding you here, like a lullaby in a dream, someone speaking to you softly, whispering everything, telling you that someday, everything will be just fine, but do they really know you? and do they really know everything will be just fine?

    This is how your poem makes me feel. To be judged by a judge that no one should have to answer to, not all people are the same, not all dreams are related to one, and sometimes the best way to relate, just listen.


    • Kikai Ni
      February 29, 2008
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      Wow. That comment is better than my poem.
      Thank you so, so much. This is a lovely, eloquent summarization of what I meant to express and that I transmitted this to you makes me happier than you know. Such beautiful praise reminds me why I write.


  • water-spirit-ryuu
    February 29, 2008

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    Wow.
    I love/hate how all your work seams to pull tears to the inside of my eyes.
    _-_,
    I'm getting rather sick of it.
    ^^
    But still,
    I love your work and I would shed 1,000 tears just for the chance to read 1 more.
    A beautiful piece, as per your usual


    • Kikai Ni
      March 4, 2008
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      ^.^ Luvvy, you've got to stop reading when you're emotionally tired. It's not good for you.
      You exaggerate. But, hey, I won't stop you.
      Thank you ^.~


  • Dead Lover
    February 28, 2008

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    Deep!

    This poem is so true, and I know from experience that this is so. Anyways, this poem had such great flow! I actually read it a second time to make sure I got the full effect! This piece is spectacular, and you stand a chance of placing, Great write!


    • Kikai Ni
      February 28, 2008

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      I'm always to glad to write something people can relate to.
      My inspiration was a song called "Accidents Happen" and I think the name of the band is Sixx:AM or something similar to that.

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