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I’ll drink it away, sleep it away.

I’ll drink it away, sleep it away.














Thirtieth celebration of my birth.
Angled badly in the corner asleep, shivering under flimsy, thin coverings.
A single candle in dry cake tainted by street wind.

Last of my allowance (Bottle of beer, two standard drinks),
pity money from window washing. Dodging intolerant cars, begging
but a few no cash exchanging hands.
Can’t argue the growl of their engines,
monsters of metal revving threats of barrelling over me, “back away!”
Spiteful of my life, yet I go on. The candle burns.
Quivering in intense frigidity, bitter and hopeless, I have no wish.

Author notes

Credit picture..poem was inspired by & for contest ---
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http://photographerr.deviantart.com/art/homeless-41542799

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 3, 2008

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    Sis... you always write with such brilliance!!
    You have painted a vivid picture of what life is like for some... sad... haunting even!

    Great job sweetheart!


  • plainoljoe
    March 1, 2008

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    it's not all with a sadness that I remember this life. For it was at this point God drove me to my knees and lifted up an addict never more. Great pic inspiration verse for us all to think about and perhaps do some personal re-evaluation of how we look at life

    Joe

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    February 28, 2008

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    This is wonderful.... I love the images you painted here, you did step outside the box and I like that

    Thanks for taking the time to enter, wishing you the best of luck

    Karen


  • peridotPixi
    February 28, 2008

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    awsome

    i really like the feelings and the way you expressed them with all the detials of the picture, good luck on the contest, keep writing, -Amy


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    This is such a great poem. You have done so well here to show so much emotion through this and how this person feels so hopeless. Well done.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    February 28, 2008
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    oh yay auntie this is a beautiful write and i love the language and the way you wrote it. you certainly did an amazing write. hehe i love you with all my heart


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      February 28, 2008

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      Thanks Char..You lovely girl you , always saying the nicest things, I love you too


      Aunty Cin


  • jackysunshine
    February 28, 2008
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    excellent - very thought provoking.


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    You did a wonderful job with the prompt, sweetness. The feeling of hopelessness came through good and strong. Congratulations on a deep and heartfelt poem.

    Love always
    Mum


  • poppa
    February 28, 2008

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    Well done Cin....this could be a biography on any of the many homeless people in the world today.....touching write...so thankful that my life is not like this....


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      February 28, 2008
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      Thanks Darl

      I tried hard with this one, injecting emotion, staying true


      CIn

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