I fear I cannot be in anyone else's head at this moment,
I fear to be that presumptuous--
There is a mangrove crab that is cooling off in a pot
by the window-sill in my kitchen,
and my English professor said "Fuck" twice in a minute tonight,
the nicest epitomy of feminism I have ever met.
I love my English professor and her family, but I worry
that I may overstep my boundaries as a student--but she is nice;
Jaylynn just read me this list of symptoms ADHD people have
from the book "Driven to Distraction"-- we both said "yes" a lot...
I think Bram Stoker used his novel Dracula as a vehicle
for his homoerotic tendencies, and I realize that I will burn
in Catholic hell, a notion that is further exacerbated by
the amount of Camel Lights Turkish Blends I smoke on an hourly basis
I wonder if this poem is too long in the couplets I am constructing,
and I hope the judge doesn't mind too much,
whoops! there I go being presumptuous again, I fear, oh well, speaking
of Turkish people, I wonder why I am so drawn to them:
They are leagues away from my tiny island-home, but they still resemble
some of us to an extent...hmm...where was I? Oh yeah, Catholic hell--
it might not be so bad; I remember when I told my brother I was
a schizophrenic with multiple personalities...he called us liars...
Bastard! I wonder sometimes if I am really adopted...I joke often
that I have a pointy penis, if only to make my guy friends cringe
or wonder if I am telling the truth...it seems so hilarious, but
inside...I hope I am wrong...what would I do with an extra extremity?
Ahh, my ignorance is profound...and that leaves me with quite a
conundrum: what makes me think even that?
A contest entry
- 30 Seconds in Someone’s Head by MJ Donnelly.
1000 points, ended March 13, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - POEM NOT FOUND (404) error error error (prewrites allowed) by Alex Hex.
300 points, ended May 19, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Critique Please! Be Ruthless! I Like It Rough!
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Perfect title for a perfect poem.
Congrats on the gold, well deserved.
I love the random quirky-ness of this and how your thoughts just go on and on. Great job...
Becky
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I love it.
Congrats on the gold.
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Congratulations!
Bravo!
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Awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
To all of you, thanks.Your train of thougth I prrrfect!! This is honest to god one of the best things I read in a while. It seems so familiar. hmmmmm. Where was I going. Ireland? Have lots of fun, and good luck wit the contest.=))
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OMG! This is great! Precisely what I was hoping for!
Well done! LOL!
mj. *oh, my sides hurt
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I did like the random thoughts that were displayed. I think it will do well. The word fear was used often. Perhaps you could find another.
Other words for fear:
afraid, scared, scary, terror
Have a good night.
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