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The Amenities of Love

Commonalities are not so rare

Amongst those who do share

Tender pleasantries of the heart,

 

And long is painful suffering

As devotees begin buffering,

Hoping love will never depart.

 

Yes, happiness abounds with they

Who ponder all through the day

On just how to please their lover,

 

And so goes the blissful dealings

As two souls bask in their feelings,

Satisfied in the arms of one another.

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  • Flight of Dragons
    February 29, 2008
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    Very good your use of words in telling your feelings is well put. a good read, well done.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    Sigh! That's the way true love should be. Pondering how to please your lover and feeling satisfied in their embrace! Hope to find that one day myself...

    Another beautifully penned write about love... you really know how to write this thoughts and feelings hun!


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    beautiful

    I love it when you speak the language of love.
    Your rhyme scheme was brilliant and well executed. The style was flawless.
    Good luck in the contest (though I seriously doubt you need luck - you have talent!)


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    this is such a beautiful write. ive never had love so i can only imagine but you have penned the emotion so beautifully and deep well done


  • luna-midnight gold member
    February 28, 2008
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    awww this is really beautiful, great job! good luck in the contest
    stephanie =)


  • michichoeret
    February 28, 2008
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    very nifty

    especially love the "tender pleasantries of the heart"


  • LittleMoon silver member
    February 28, 2008

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    Very, very nice MJ. I really like this one and enjoyed reading. The rhyming is great and I like that style but most of all is the content, your words are beautiful.


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    To stay within the arms of the one you love and soak up every feeling, every nuance of what you share is truly a wonderful way to spend your time. Sometimes just the chance to look into each others eyes and know what's there is all you need. To give pleasure to each other by words and deeds is a very important part of a loving relationship. You described this so beautifully; you always choose the right words. Best wishes in the contest.




  • tara wilson gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    this is a sweet & beautiful poem...

    "Yes, happiness abounds with they

    Who ponder all through the day

    On just how to please their lover,


    And so goes the blissful dealings

    As two souls bask in their feelings,

    Satisfied in the arms of one another"

    love this little rhyme...

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