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You never saw

You looked at me

And you never saw

You got fooled by my fake smile

And never knew of the pain it masked

You gazed into my eyes

And never thought of the tears that fell from them

You noticed my legs

And never considered the demons they run from

You touched my chest

And never felt the broken heart that that lie beneath it

You had my body

And you never got to know the lonely girl inside of it

You looked at me

And you never saw

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  • XxMaDiSoNxX
    December 9, 2008
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    wow this is one of the most beautiful poems i have ever seen.
    i can relate so much.


  • ThatONEweirdChick
    March 8, 2008

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    Wow that's a deep concept to look at someone and never really see them. Complicated view of things but nicely summed up in this poem , thanks for adding it to my contest.


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    March 5, 2008

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    I really feel that this is a beautiful poem. The heartbreak and pain really come through your words. I really really like it. but it really doesnt fit the topic of my contest. Thank you for entering it thought it really is a beautiful read.

  • U.g.l.y.
    February 28, 2008

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    Someone falling in love with a body, huh? Nice one, I love the usage of repetitions there. It creates a certain echo between the ideas and the feelings behind them, or probably it's the disposition.