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Song

Limpid pools of blue &
A touch of hazel playfully
Appearing in your eyes
Your perfect lips
It's just heaven to watch
Them move for every word

Heart thumping so hard
But when we start to sing

Everything becomes so still
Everything else is nothing
But noise


Every song we sing
Every laugh we share
Brings us closer
You still surprise me
With your little acts of
Teenage romance

The song ends
In perfect harmony
And you looked into my eyes
Taking me away

Promise me you'll sing
Another song with me

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Contest Grammy Awards ~ From Bronze to Gold
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  • Re-invention silver member
    June 18, 2008
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    aww so sweet and tender.. congrats on trophies hun!


  • transit
    May 31, 2008

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    aaww

    I love this poem. I think it is a little better than the previous one. The first stanza had awesome imagery and it got me hyper- ventilating. no maybe just gushing

    The message sent across os just right and I like how this was not too close to the prompt so it seemed your own but the inspiration is there.

    "A touch of hazel playfully
    Appearing in your eyes
    Your perfect lips
    It's just heaven to watch
    Them move for every word"

    loved these lines. Congrats on the other bronzes won! you deserved them. Good luck!

    loveees,
    transit~


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    May 2, 2008
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    This was a sweet melody! It is done really well. thank you for this outstanding entry!


  • Breezie
    April 30, 2008

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    This is adorable! I love the sweet innocene and magic of music! I have felt this way, and it is just magic. I can't think of many other words! =)
    Great job and best of luck in the contest!


  • Pretty Britty
    March 25, 2008
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    This one is very unique and cute... I like how the rhythm plays part in the poem.


  • Rilly
    February 29, 2008

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    i can't deny that this is beautiful.
    i like how you mixed rhyming and non-rhyming together and it still worked out perfectly.
    great job && good luck =]
    Rilly

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